SNASHU Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 hey could you give me a rating for this card please. if it is a bit slopy it is because i have not made a card in a year or so [img]http://img705.imageshack.us/img705/3384/394253.jpg[/img] Effect: When this monster is summoned to the field, destroy all monsters on your opponents side of the field even if your opponent activates an effect, Trap, Magic or Spell. When this monster is destroyed you may discard 2 cards and pay 800 life points to bring him back to the field in Defence mode. thanx Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 ninja isn't a real type this is OPed as hell to nuke your opponent like that, and so easily get it back onto the field you need to make the pay a hell of a lot more than just 800 LP Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SNASHU Posted February 10, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 ok what do you suggest like 1500 or 1200 life points? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 well for starters, discarding 2 of ANY cards is too cheap as well Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SNASHU Posted February 10, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 what about making it 2 level 4 or higher monsters? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 lv4 is relatively easy, I'm thinking lv6 or higher instead Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SNASHU Posted February 10, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 ok thanx soooo is this good? [img]http://img190.imageshack.us/img190/3384/394253.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
ragnarok1945 Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 it's better oh and btw, magic and spell are the same thing, so just say spell, take out the magic part Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dxjxc Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 [quote name='ragnarok1945' timestamp='1328875999' post='5808263'] it's better oh and btw, magic and spell are the same thing, so just say spell, take out the magic part [/quote] But still not great. I think that the "even if your opponent activates an effect, Trap, Magic or Spell" effect should be removed entirely. For one, its grammatically incorrect. And two, it's unnecessary. If it's summoning is negated the effect won't take effect at all, and anything chained to it probably won't fully negate the effect anyway. "To the field" is redundant, since you can't summon to anywhere else. DO NOT SAY: "Bring him back" ever. It is just wrong. Say "Special Summon from your Graveyard". Or, if you already mentioned the graveyard, just "Special Summon". Also, post fixes on first post using edit. and your title is misspelled. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted February 10, 2012 Report Share Posted February 10, 2012 As said above, the grammar throughout the effect isn't that great. The effect itself isn't that awesome really as well, mostly due to the fact that, to a small extent it's slightly broken. As you can just keep on bringing it back onto the field continuously nuking the field every time you do so. However i don't think the trade off (2 6* or more monsters and 1200 LP) is worth it really, as those monsters could be much more worthy in a situation than this monster and the life points are generally important. I would change it to one cost or another, not both. An also change the "even if your opponent activates an effect, Trap, Magic or spell" to "this effect cannot be negated" or something similar, Although that may contradict my previous points but oh well, do what you think is best. Overall Grade C+ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SNASHU Posted February 11, 2012 Author Report Share Posted February 11, 2012 Ok thanks for your advise guys and i will no better for next time. as i said at the beginning of this post i am still a bit rusty at this. cheers Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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