My First WATER support, [Pure Ice Angel- Clearea]

[Akeno_Ederis_17]

[left]Cause the "level up!" kind of monsters are just too mainstream (for me)[/left]

[left]The main idea I have on this card is to make a monster who increases it's power as she leaves the field and returns to it.[/left]

[left]I designed her to be initially weak then slowly becomes a "beatstick" whose also a "nuker" without making her broken (hopefully). Like the "level up!" monsters. the card her self being those different "levels"[/left]

[left]So if you can, i would really love to hear your comment if I was somehow able to achieve this concept. [/left]


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[center][b]LORE:[/b][/center]
[center][color=#000080][b]Cannot be Special summoned. Must be summoned by its own effect. Discard a number of level 3 or lower WATER monsters (max 5); special summon this card (from your hand). The ATK of this card is equal to the combined ATK of the monters discarded for this card's summon and their combined level x 300. You can banish 1 WATER monster on your graveyard and target 1 WATER monster on your deck; all copies of the targeted monster's level becomes 3 (permanently).On the End phase of the turn that this card is summoned, destroy this card with 3 other cards on the field then add 1 "Umi" from your deck or graveyard to your hand.[/b][/color][/center]
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[b]REPAIRED LORE:[/b][/center]
[center][b][color=#ff0000]Cannot be normal summoned. Cannot be Special summoned except by it's own effect.[/color] [color=#000080]Discard a number of level 3 or lower WATER monsters (max 5); special summon this card (from your hand). The ATK of this card is equal to the combined ATK of the monters discarded for this card's summon and their combined level x 300. You can banish 1 WATER monster [/color][color=#ff0000]in[/color][color=#000080] your graveyard and target 1 WATER monster [/color][color=#ff0000]in[/color][color=#000080] your deck; all copies of the targeted monster's level becomes 3 (permanently).On the End phase of the turn that this card is summoned, destroy this card with [/color][color=#ff0000]2 [/color][color=#000080]other cards on the field then add 1 "Umi" from your deck or graveyard to your hand.[/color][/b][/center]
[left]It's my first time making a WATER support, so I hope this goes well.[/left]

[left]For me, if ever i were going to use this card, I would use multiple copies of her to create a WATER beatstick by turning high level beatstick WATER monsters into level 3 then discard them for her 3rd copy's effect, which could give her 5000+ ATK points if successful.[/left]

[left]I would really love to hear your comments, suggestions, or criticisms on this card.[/left]

[left]Is she OP'ed, UP'ed, or balanced.[/left]

[left]Too Strict? broken? or will it fit the WATER monsters?[/left]


[left][b]Thanks^^ [/b][/left]

[seattleite]

Oh man, lots going on here.

For the first clause I think you mean to take out the first part, the first and second sentences are contradictory. Or maybe they aren't and i'm just behind the times in OCG. Also, the (Max:5) is probably not necessary because no one in their right mind would try to make an OTK with this card and discard 8 monsters or something.

[color=#000080][b]The ATK of this card is equal to the combined ATK of the monters discarded for this card's summon and their combined level x 300. You can banish 1 WATER monster on your graveyard and target 1 WATER monster on your deck; all copies of the targeted monster's level becomes 3 (permanently).[/b][/color]

Now this is pretty cool. Not gonna get pretty powerful fast, but the potential's there. The other effect encourages running 3 copies of various WATER monsters. Fuels for another copy.

[color=#000080][b]On the End phase of the turn that this card is summoned, destroy this card with 3 other cards on the field then add 1 "Umi" from your deck or graveyard to your hand.[/b][/color]

The part I have a problem with. Nuking any 3 cards on the field for only a discard of 1 Level 3 or lower (which is the minimum), and then searching out ALO is too much IMO. 2 cards at the most, at least then it's a +1 and still in danger of Starlight Road.

I like the name and the image - it's a little overused, but good.

[Akeno_Ederis_17]

[quote name='seattleite' timestamp='1337494641' post='5943091']
Oh man, lots going on here.

For the first clause I think you mean to take out the first part, the first and second sentences are contradictory. Or maybe they aren't and i'm just behind the times in OCG. Also, the (Max:5) is probably not necessary because no one in their right mind would try to make an OTK with this card and discard 8 monsters or something.

[b][color=#ff0000]They are contradictory, fixed it now, thanks a lot for that, I added the max 5 cause I thought about the last copy of this card hitting the field, even though the chances are low, i placed a limit so that the 3rd copy won't be abused, at least it's max ATK won't go over 7,000 points.[/color][/b]

[color=#000080][b]The ATK of this card is equal to the combined ATK of the monters discarded for this card's summon and their combined level x 300. You can banish 1 WATER monster on your graveyard and target 1 WATER monster on your deck; all copies of the targeted monster's level becomes 3 (permanently).[/b][/color]

Now this is pretty cool. Not gonna get pretty powerful fast, but the potential's there. The other effect encourages running 3 copies of various WATER monsters. Fuels for another copy.

[color=#ff0000][b]I'm glad you somehow appreciated this part, . though I'm really unsure whether WATER using decks have numerous high levels and beatsticks to work with this effect.[/b][/color]

[color=#000080][b]On the End phase of the turn that this card is summoned, destroy this card with 3 other cards on the field then add 1 "Umi" from your deck or graveyard to your hand.[/b][/color]

The part I have a problem with. Nuking any 3 cards on the field for only a discard of 1 Level 3 or lower (which is the minimum), and then searching out ALO is too much IMO. 2 cards at the most, at least then it's a +1 and still in danger of Starlight Road.

[b][color=#ff0000]Thanks for this one, I forgot to consider that she can be used only for this part of her effect when in great need.[/color][/b]

I like the name and the image - it's a little overused, but good.

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[color=#696969][b]Thanks for the review. ^^[/b][/color]

[Akeno_Ederis_17]

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[Akeno_Ederis_17]

Le bump, cause I'm looking for more reviews and comments for this card. :l

[Love of Ghibli]

I like the card for what it is thanks to minuses in the hand. I would say that this card with Legendary Ocean on the field can be very powerful very quickly. The effect of changing a monster level permanently is also humorous because it is and effect that lingers after she has died. I really think this card is strong because of all the water support coming out in the next set she can be very dangerous especially since she can search for both of the non-umi field cards.

Also I am pretty sure the card should say "in your graveyard" and "in your deck" not "on"

[Akeno_Ederis_17]

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I like the card for what it is thanks to minuses in the hand. I would say that this card with Legendary Ocean on the field can be very powerful very quickly. The effect of changing a monster level permanently is also humorous because it is and effect that lingers after she has died. I really think this card is strong because of all the water support coming out in the next set she can be very dangerous especially since she can search for both of the non-umi field cards.

Also I am pretty sure the card should say "in your graveyard" and "in your deck" not "on"
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I'm not really updated with WATER cards >.<

Anyway, fixed the minor errors, thanks for the review ^^