Rise of Dragons ( My First Few Cards )

[CardReaper]

[b][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]I have recently just begun making cards and I've finished a few that I could use some feedback on. I'm a somewhat proud of them, but I'd like to know where I could improve. Any praise/constructive criticism is greatly appreciated. Thank you![/font][/size][/b]

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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by sacrificing 1 DARK and 1 LIGHT Dragon-type monster from your side of the field. There can be only one "Karimaka, Lord of Dark Dragon" on the field. If this monster would be destroyed by battle, you can offer 1 Dragon-type card on your side of the field except this card to negate your opponent's attack.[/font][/size][/color]


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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card cannot be Special Summoned or Set. This card can only be Ritual Summoned by the effect of the Ritual Spell card "Call of Burning Dragon". As long as this card remains face-up on the field, all Spell and Trap effects aimed at this card are negated. For every Dragon-type monster in your Graveyard, increase this card's ATK by 200.[/font][/size][/color]



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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card can only be Summoned by sacrificing two Dragon-type monsters or two DARK attribute monsters. In battle, this card can only be destroyed by a LIGHT attribute monster.[/font][/size][/color]




[img]http://i.imgur.com/sJSH2.jpg[/img]

[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card can only be Summoned by sacrificing two Dragon-type monsters or two LIGHT attribute monsters. In battle, this card can only be destroyed by a DARK attribute monster.[/font][/size][/color]




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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card is used to Ritual Summon "Hamun The Infernal". You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 10 or more as a Tribute from the field or your hand.[/font][/size][/color]

[Expelsword]

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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by tributing 1 DARK and 1 LIGHT Dragon-type monster from either your hand or your side of the field. Increase this card's ATK by 300 for every banished Dragon-type monster. If this monster would be destroyed as a result of battle, you can Tribute 1 Dragon-type monster you control instead[/font][/size][/color].


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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card can only be Ritual Summoned with the Ritual Spell card "Call of Burning Dragon". As long as this card remains face-up on the field, all of your opponent's card effects are negated. Once per turn, you can banish 1 monster in your Graveyard to destroy 1 card your opponent controls.[/font][/size][/color]



[img]http://i.imgur.com/M7Lwu.jpg[/img]

[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by tributing 2 Dragon-type monsters or 2 DARK attribute monsters. This card gains 400 ATK for every Dragon-type monster in your Graveyard and 200 ATK for each Dragon-type monster in your opponent's Graveyard.[/font][/size][/color]


[img]http://i.imgur.com/IFYCO.jpg[/img]

[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: [/font][/size][/color][color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card can only be Special Summoned by tributing 2 Dragon-type monsters or 2 LIGHT attribute monsters.[/font][/size][/color][color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif] If this card is the only Dragon-type monster you control, it is destroyed during the End Phase.[/font][/size][/color]


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[color=#0000FF][size=5][font=times new roman,times,serif]Effect: This card is used to Ritual Summon "Hamun The Infernal". You must also offer monsters whose total Level Stars equal 10 or more as a Tribute from the field or your hand.[/font][/size][/color]
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For once, it looks like someone read an actual card before writing the effect of their own. They're still slightly off, though...
Even disregarding that, these cards are way too powerful.

Karimaka is easy to summon, starts out with too much ATK and only gains more - it's never going to have to use its effect.
Hamun prevents the opponent from using any effects at all, which means there's no way for them to win once it's summoned.
Valendras and Rayun are also just too strong.

[sniperray213]

these are really good cards.

[CardReaper]

I thought as much. I'm planning on re-doing my cards so that they have less power and less OP effects. I really appreciate your input and I'm definitely going to use it.

So I made a few changes to the cards. Their abilities have been changed and their ATK and DEF points have been lowered.