Galkin Posted July 7, 2012 Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 [img]http://i.imgur.com/X9AOr.jpg[/img] [quote]Few can envisage Death fostering a scion. Many would surmise that Death was insentient, nonetheless the veracity is antithesis. Mary evinces homicidal, puerile proclivities, moreover her connatural proficiency with the scythe has evoked her to seethe spasmodically into a myriads of sanguinary slaughters upon all who she espy.[/quote] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted July 7, 2012 Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 TBH there isn't much to say, except: DON'T MAKE IT A WARRIOR FOR FRIGGIN' SAKE. When you're going to give a Level 4 Vanilla rediculously high stats, don't make it Warrior or Dinosaur-Type. Because duh. Also, vanilla descriptions can be done [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/231960-cards-tell-a-story-the-dismal-world-of-bellum/]way[/url] [url=http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/272383-vanillas-with-badass-description-are-the-best-doom-laser-the-hypertech-arsenal/]better[/url]. They key is to use overly complicated words no one can understand. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galkin Posted July 7, 2012 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 Noted; I have posted her edited version. She is no longer a Warrior and is now a Spellcaster. ...And I think her description is better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
DARKPLANT RISING Posted July 7, 2012 Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 But now the Official English Grammar is off. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Alpakha Posted July 7, 2012 Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 Cannot understand a thing in the card description..... GOOD JOB, no just kidding. Your grammar is off and using words wrong (thesauruses don't tell you the connotation of words or how to use them ). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galkin Posted July 7, 2012 Author Report Share Posted July 7, 2012 Particularly in which words? I'm guessing I used "Antipode", "Jejune", "Myriad" and "Proficiency" wrong. I think "descry" and "evince" are a little off. btw, I used more than just a thesaurus to look up the words. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Galkin Posted July 8, 2012 Author Report Share Posted July 8, 2012 [b]BUMP[/b] Okay, I think I got some of the OEG right this time.It should make more sense, but since I'm horrible at OEG, it probably still needs correcting Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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