New Member/ New Cards - A Night of Falling Stars

[Mephisto96]

Here are some of my recently made cards:

[img]http://i.imgur.com/Z5dcY.jpg[/img]

[img]http://i.imgur.com/WgpJ4.jpg[/img]

[img]http://i.imgur.com/m0FGE.jpg[/img]

[Mephisto96]

So, what you guys think ?

[Garthfunkle Vii Backwards]

ocg need fixing

not unquie effects

10 okay kinda new but should have a effect for xyz and synchro

[Alpakha]

Nice idea but needs some work. Though they aren't bad for a new comer.
The first card's effect doesn't make sense (what do you mean by your opponent's position). Also the card should say "it" not "he".
For the second card, you might want to lower the attack a bit, maybe to 1500.
The third card is too graphic, notice the girl in the bottom...you can see her breasts o.0 COVER HER UP!!!!
Lastly, all of these cards need their ocg (official card grammar) fixed.

[Synchronized]

I can appreciate a new member being able to make some solid cards and have a diverse amount of effects, as well, but these are pretty bland.

With the first one, based on the wording, I'm unsure whether or not it's decent. If it's the way I think it is, it should probably be worded like this:

[quote]Cannot be destroyed by battle. When this card battles an opponent's monster, depending on its Battle Position, apply one of the following effects:
* Attack Position: The opponent's monster loses 300 ATK (after Damage Calculation).
* Defense Position: The opponent's monster loses 300 DEF (after Damage Calculation).[/quote]

Note, I'm not sure how the bullet points work, so I left that part out only because I'm not really sure how to include that. That's just the (most up-to-date) proper OCG.

The second one:

[quote]This card gains 200 ATK and 100 DEF for each Spell Card in your Graveyard.[/quote]

The third one:

[quote]When this card destroys an opponent's monster by battle and sends it to the Graveyard: Activate one of the following effects depending on the type of monster destroyed:
* Normal Monster: Draw 1 card.
* Effect Monster: Target 1 card in your Graveyard; shuffle that target into the Deck.
* Fusion Monster: Target 1 random card in your opponent's hand; send that target to the Graveyard.
* Ritual Monster: This card gains 400 ATK.[/quote]

As for the cards themselves:

* The first one seems to be somewhat interesting; I actually do see potential there in its own Deck as it [i]is[/i] a Horn of the Phantom Beast target, and has invulnerability in battle. It would at least be worth trying out, though the design is somewhat simple.

* The second one doesn't have much of a particular use, and realistically the only use I could see is for it to somehow OTK in a Magical Merchant-based Deck. That said, it's probably far too slow and not worth actually relying on in a build like that, so I don't see it being too relevant at all.

* The third one is really only useful if you destroy a Normal Monster, and there are other cards that do the job better. I think it's just too slow to be good.

It's a nice effort, especially for a new member, though.

Keep going, you'll get better.

[Mephisto96]

Thank you all for your feedback and sugestions. be sure that I will consider everyone`s ideas when correcting these mistakes. However, I feel like I should give explainations about the Taurus` effect since people were confused with the way I wrote it.

It works like this: Since Taurus can`t be sent to the graveyard, the monster who defeated him will lose 300 points according to the position it was when it defeated taurus.

Example: If taurus attack a monster in defense position and it`s defense is stronger than Taurus attack, the monster will lose 300 DEF points.