minecraft R Posted July 19, 2012 Report Share Posted July 19, 2012 [img]http://i.imgur.com/6W1XL.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/uVVh9.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/ciani.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/rAgwV.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/OH2NO.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/zKwzL.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/MWj8x.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/L1HoX.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/u6S26.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/AB1ZA.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/k30wv.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/houEq.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/49Yfz.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/Ex4EP.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/eXMRE.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/BpXrp.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/YYFmf.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/Jcsn2.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/lgg6U.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/nVxIV.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/MuuOq.jpg[/img][img]http://i.imgur.com/AnjqQ.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gojira/Godzilla Posted July 19, 2012 Report Share Posted July 19, 2012 [color=#000000][b]Y U NO learn proper OCG or actual types?![/b][/color] [color=#000000][/color] [color=#000000][b]OT: E- (Being Generous). These cards are awful, and they make no sense at all. You should at least use real types, [/b][/color] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Airride Posted July 19, 2012 Report Share Posted July 19, 2012 I feel obligated to go through Some of these of these and fix them. First off, I'm going to say: Heed the advice (What little there is) of the guy above me, and learn OCG [Original Card Grammar]. It makes your cards easier to read, and people will more likely actually look at your cards. Anyway... [b]Argarus[/b] (I think?) Unsummonable. Since Lycan Descendant is Level 2, I HAVE to use a Level 8 for this, but Mutant Descendant is level 6. I'm not sure you quite understand Synchro summoning mechanics, this seems more like a contact fusion. The effect is Good. Nothing special, but It's actually pretty realistic. [b][u]Fixes:[/u][/b] Divine Battle Monster - Argarus [b](God -> Divine because that's Konami-Like.)[/b] (DARK) ******** [b](Level 8, Level 10 seems a bit too much.)[/b] Beast-Warrior[b](Real Type)[/b]/Synchro/Effect 1 "Battle Monster" Tuner Monster + 1 Or More Non-Tuner "Battle Monster" Monsters [b](Fairer conditions.)[/b] Once Per Turn: Target 1 Level 7 or Lower Monster on the Field; Destroy it, Negate the effects of the target, and Inflict damage to your opponent equal to It's Level x200. ATK/2850 DEF/1500 [b]Xylnthian[/b] Also unsummonable. Neither Monster is a Tuner, and they don't even add up to Level 12. Anyaway, the Attribute is silly (Should just be FIRE or DARK), the ATK/DEF are ridiculous, and the effect is a bit OP, but it is supposed to be tough to summon, so...I think I can salvage this. [u][b]Fixes:[/b][/u] Divine Battle Monster - Xylnthian (FIRE) ************ 1 "Battle Monster" Tuner Monster + 2 Or More Non-Tuner "Battle Monster" Monsters Must be Synchro Summoned, and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. [b](To prevent Reborn and Stuff abusing it's giant ATK.)[/b] When this card is Synchro Summoned: Target Level 5 or Lower Monsters on your Opponent's Field Equal to or Less than the Amount of Non-Tuner Monsters used for the Synchro Summon of this card; Destroy those targets.[b](Effect nerfed to be less evil, though it will likely do the same thing.)[/b] ATK/4000 DEF/4000 [b](Balanced a Bit Better.)[/b] [b]Argos[/b] It's a Union Monster. Y u no make it one? That aside, It's majorly UP, and should be brought back to the drawing Board. I'll fix it anyway, but... [u][b]Fixes:[/b][/u] Battle Monster Titan - Argos (EARTH) ****** [b](Should Just be Level 6, No point in making it ridiculous to summon.)[/b] Warrior/Union Once per turn, you can either: Target 1 face-up "Battle Monster"" monster you control; equip this card to that target, OR: Unequip this card and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster Gains 1000 ATK and DEF. (A monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, destroy this card instead.) ATK/2400 DEF/2000 [b](Buffed a bit to be better.)[/b] [b]Behmoth[/b] No. Just...No. The concept is Ok, but being punished for getting my summon negated? No. Get back to the Drawing board with this one. It's ATK/DEF should be beefier, It's a level 6 after all. (Also should be a Beast) [b]Mutant Descendant[/b] Needs an Effect. Too little ATK for a Level 6. Needs to be Beast-Warrior. That's all. [b]Ent[/b] Not bad, just severely UP. Might want to Give it a slightly better effect. [u][b]Fixes:[/b][/u] Battle Monster - Ent (EARTH) *** Plant/Effect At the start of the Damage Step, if this card battles a FIRE or DARK Monster: Destroy that monster immediately (without damage calculation) and Gain 500 Life Points for ever Other "Battle Monster" you control. [b](Not sure if this is What you wanted, but the wording you gave seems like it.)[/b] ATK/1250 DEF/1000 [b]Inferno Fiend[/b] [b](Konami Like!)[/b] Really Good. Like, really Good. I like it. [u][b]Fixes:[/b][/u] Battle Monster - Inferno Fiend (FIRE) *** Pyro/Tuner [b](So you can Actually Use it for Xylnthian)[/b] When this card is Destroyed by Battle and Sent to the Graveyard: Special Summon 2 "Battle Monster From your Deck. Their Effects Are negated. [b](No Point in being Level 5 or Lower, plus can set up an instant Argarus)[/b] ATK/1100 DEF/800 [b]Lycan Descendant[/b] Effect is SO UP. Just make it another effect. (And a Beast/Beast-Warrior) ...That'll be enough for now, I'm a bit tired of typing. I'll fix the other cards a bit later. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TenshiNoTeze Posted July 19, 2012 Report Share Posted July 19, 2012 I dont see how this is a Deck So many OCG errors... you didn't even capitalize most of the names. These seem pretty rushed Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minecraft R Posted July 20, 2012 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2012 um guys so you know im very new and i don't get what stuff like OCG and im having a hard time making cards 1st it's card to make the names cool and unique. 2nd it takes me like 30 mins to find good pics and then sometimes when i upload it says it's too big. 3rd i have to make effects that aren't too over the top and not to stupid or low either. 4th i have to make it all good with atk/def, level, effect or whether it's a vanilla or a synchro for the right cards so plz guys don't be too harsh i'm new thats why i like to put up rate from E- to A+ and leave little comment why you gave it that like you gave me a C- for effects stuff like that cuz i don't like being picked on because you guys have been on here longer than me and you guys know how to make cards and i might check your guys cards out and i'll rate them E- to A+ and leave little comment why. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
minecraft R Posted July 20, 2012 Author Report Share Posted July 20, 2012 i'm just gonna delete all my cards and start a new. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FUNE Posted July 20, 2012 Report Share Posted July 20, 2012 OCG: nhew Artwork: nhew Capitalizaition: nhew Effects: nhew nhew/10 Advice: Search for Jazin Kay's artwork, read your yugio cards for effects and OCG and start capitalizing things... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Airride Posted July 24, 2012 Report Share Posted July 24, 2012 [quote name='minecraft R' timestamp='1342822475' post='5984078']um guys so you know im very new and i don't get what stuff like OCG and im having a hard time making cards[b] (That's why I attempted to fix it in my Post!)[/b] 1st it's card to make the names cool and unique. [b](I like the Battle Monster archetype's names, but the rest ARE kinda unoriginal and generic.)[/b] 2nd it takes me like 30 mins to find good pics and then sometimes when i upload it says it's too big. [b](There is an FAQ for finding pics for your cards here at YCm. Look for it!)[/b] 3rd i have to make effects that aren't too over the top and not to stupid or low either. [b](I addressed this in my post.)[/b] 4th i have to make it all good with atk/def, level, effect or whether it's a vanilla or a synchro for the right cards [b](Also addressed the worst cases.)[/b] so plz guys don't be too harsh i'm new thats why i like to put up rate from E- to A+ and leave little comment why you gave it that like you gave me a C- for effects stuff like that cuz i don't like being picked on because you guys have been on here longer than me and you guys know how to make cards and i might check your guys cards out and i'll rate them E- to A+ and leave little comment why.[/quote]Comments in Bold. I feel like you didn't read my post(It is very long, after all), but before you judge EVERYONE (Even though we are kinda jerks about cards like these that have really poor grammar and stuff), at least skim over mine. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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