Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted August 1, 2012 Report Share Posted August 1, 2012 [img]http://i302.photobucket.com/albums/nn112/Admiral_Stalfos19/TempleoftheQueens.png[/img] [spoiler=Lore (in case you can't read that small of text)]While this card is face-up on the field, "Mystical Beast of Serket"s on the field cannot be destroyed by their own effects. Once per turn, players can discard 1 card to banish 1 Set Trap Card they control. If a Trap card is banished this way, its effect activates immediately. Once per turn, players can target 1 "Mystical Beast of Serket" on the field, and banish it. After this effect resolves, the turn player may activate either of the following effects: * Target 1 monster in your hand or Deck, whose Level is lower than or equal to your current number of Life Points divided by 600, rounded down, and banish it. During your next Standby Phase, Special Summon the target. Tributes are required for Level 5 or higher monsters. * Target 1 monster in your Extra Deck whose Level is lower than or equal to your current number of Life Points divided by 600, rounded down. Banish, from your hand, Deck, or Graveyard, suitable Fusion, Synchro or Xyz Material Monsters for the target. During your next Standby Phase, Special Summon the target, and if the target was an Xyz Monster, attach the monsters banished by this effect to the target as Xyz Materials. (<-- That last word was a typo that I just realized I made in the last second)[/spoiler] As you can probably tell, I've decided to stick with the old OCG, since the new one's too complicated for my liking, and I made this with a modded MSE, which I've [i]finally[/i] decided to update for once. Haven't quite got all the fonts I need for it to look like an authentic card though, as I still haven't managed to find the right one for the text. So far, I have Matrixregularsmallcaps for the title and Matrixboldsmallcaps for the ATK/DEF/Type thing, and I'm pretty sure I have to find yet another Matrix font, but right now I can't be assed searching for the right one. Anyway, about the card itself. So basically what I've done is addressed (or tried to) each of the key elements of the ungodly broken Temple of the Kings, while still allowing the player to actually [i]perform[/i] the tasks that he or she could with the after-mentioned card. Another thing I've done is made [i]this[/i] card a Field Spell Card and, because rule of thumb, made its effect global. Not that it'll make a [i]major[/i] difference in balance, but you never know; it might just be the tip of the iceberg. Plus there's the preventSerketfromselfdestructing effect, which is mandatory because TotQ needs it for its other two effects. Hopefully that way Serket would be more/remotely popular. ... I can probably work on it a bit more tomorrow if it's still broken; this is just what I've whipped up so far in the middle of the night. So... yeah, fire away with them critiques, I guess =/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.GhostRyder Posted August 1, 2012 Report Share Posted August 1, 2012 Good effort. Seems pretty solid. As a whole I think it works. Love the image as well. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted August 1, 2012 Author Report Share Posted August 1, 2012 Thank you. Good to know my ambitions have paid off [i]so[/i] far Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
newhat Posted August 3, 2012 Report Share Posted August 3, 2012 Last effect should say Level or Rank. As for the balance of the card, hard to say. I suggest changing what happens to the banished trap to "you can activate that banished Trap" instead of "its effect activates immediately"; otherwise it evades costs on things like Backs to the Wall. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted August 3, 2012 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2012 Oh yeah, forgot about that loophole =/ As for missing the Rank, it was because it was made late at night. I'll get to editing the card now (as well as fixing that typo). Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thekazu4u Posted August 3, 2012 Report Share Posted August 3, 2012 Personally, I'd throw in the trap effect there somewhere. The whole summoning monster thing doesn't seem to go into the whole theme of the card. The scorpion is supposed to kill them. Make it something like "Once per turn, during either player's turn you can activate 1 Trap card from your hand" or something. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Admiral_Stalfos19 Posted August 3, 2012 Author Report Share Posted August 3, 2012 Trap effect's already in there. [quote name='Admiral_Stalfos19' timestamp='1343821605' post='5994312']Once per turn, players can discard 1 card to banish 1 Set Trap Card they control. If a Trap card is banished this way, its effect activates immediately. [/quote] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thekazu4u Posted August 3, 2012 Report Share Posted August 3, 2012 [quote] [color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Trap effect's already in there [/quote][/background][/size][/font][/color] [font="tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif"][color="#5a5a5a"][size=3]I was referring to from hand. Setting and waiting causes things to miss timing (i.e. when they are used legitly) and still keeps the OTK/FTK aspect of things like reckless greed. Just let it use from hand, once per turn.[/size][/color][/font][quote] [color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Trap effect's already in there [/quote][/background][/size][/font][/color] [font="tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif"][color="#5a5a5a"][size=3]I was referring to from hand. Setting and waiting causes things to miss timing (i.e. when they are used legitly) and still keeps the OTK/FTK aspect of things like reckless greed. Just let it use from hand, once per turn.[/size][/color][/font] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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