Ares, God of War

[Lord English]

Recently I decided to start a Greek god set. This is the only card I've made (other than the card that Special Summons this one) and I'd like some idea what you guys would think. I'm not COMPLETELY sure that the OCG is correct.

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[spoiler=Lore]This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card must be Special Summoned by "Twelve Olympians - Ares" and cannot be Special Summoned by other ways. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, all cards you control (except "Ares, God of War") inflict Piercing Battle Damage.[/spoiler]

Hope you guys enjoy. Constructive criticism appreciated

[wightpower]

Oh nice, a Genzoman pic.

I'm not entirely sure, but I think the only thing you would need to change in the OCG is the second sentence, to something like "This card can only be Special Summoned by "Twelve Olympians - Ares". Other than that, the grammar is good. I really like your idea for the effect (although since I'm a little behind the times, I'm not 100% sure if yu-gi-oh uses the phrase "Piercing Damage". Someone will have to correct me on that), and I definitely see Ares pulling that sort of "your defenses are meaningless!" trample ability in a duel.

Now, I should probably call you out on doing Greek Mythology. I haven't been around long, and I already believe that the Greek Gods, Seven Deadly Sins, 4 classical elements, and Chinese Zodiac have been done to [i]death[/i]. There's no reason to not do your own spin on them, but I figure I'll throw out some suggestions for a unique twist you could do: The Gods are awesome, but there's a massive treasure hoard of Classical mythology that I rarely see anyone tap into with custom cards. Why not lampads, or scylla, or gorgons (not entirely sure if Yu-Gi-Oh! already used gorgons, but you know what I mean)? I'm just saying it's too simple to just go with the chief deities.

Another thing you could do is keep making each God, but don't just make a deck out of all of them in a team. Making them oppose one another and make it necessary for the player to make sacrifices for one of their strategies in exchange for shutting down other options. Or you could go even further than that and design decks specifically for each Greek God, ruling over minor monster cards based on creatures, daemons, or civilizations from Greek Mythology. From here, you could make Spartans that gain effects whenever they deal piercing damage, or something.

I don't know, I just felt like typing. Kudos if you've already thought of this before I mentioned it.

[Lord English]

Yeah, it's a Genzoman
Yeah, I wasn't sure about the Special Summon part considering that people use different sentences in OCG.
Well, Greek God set doesn't really fit the idea, I was just in a hurry. The majority of cards will have nothing to do with Greek Gods, only some, most of the cards just have to do with different types and ages of mythologies.
I'm pretty sure that Piercing Battle Damage is used in OCG.
Thanks.