Mounick Posted October 30, 2012 Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 [Spoiler=Monsters][img]http://oi48.tinypic.com/23m0ys4.jpg[/img][/spoiler] [Spoiler=Equipment][img]http://oi47.tinypic.com/2j10nx1.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/Eivql.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/rAIdt.jpg[/img] [img]http://i.imgur.com/YDpQz.jpg[/img][/spoiler] One of the many cards I've designed. It doesn't mean anything special...Perhaps the attack is op considering you can summon 2 more... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted October 30, 2012 Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 You should work on your OCG, here's a link to easily fix it in the future, for now I will just tell you what to do: [url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/162881-the-ocg-grammar-card-presentation-thread/"]http://forum.yugiohc...ntation-thread/[/url] normal summon should be Normal Summon, Tributing, zombie-type should be Zombie-Type, Special Summon, death hunters should be Death Hunters face-up should be Face-up and attack mode should be Attack Position. Also, where can you Special Summon from, deck, hand, grave or banished zone? You have to be specific. The card itself, pretty OP IMO. Seeing as you can SS two of the same, and then use them for Xyz Meterials for a Rank 7 Xyz monster. That means you need only 1 more zombie monster, and then you can use itself and that card to gain 2 cards, so yeah no tone it down a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Shinobi Phoenix Posted October 30, 2012 Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 [quote name='Zaziuma' timestamp='1351615408' post='6057275'] You should work on your OCG, here's a link to easily fix it in the future, for now I will just tell you what to do: [url="http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/162881-the-ocg-grammar-card-presentation-thread/"]http://forum.yugiohc...ntation-thread/[/url] normal summon should be Normal Summon, Tributing, zombie-type should be Zombie-Type, Special Summon, death hunters should be Death Hunters face-up should be Face-up and attack mode should be Attack Position. Also, where can you Special Summon from, deck, hand, grave or banished zone? You have to be specific. The card itself, pretty OP IMO. Seeing as you can SS two of the same, and then use them for Xyz Meterials for a Rank 7 Xyz monster. That means you need only 1 more zombie monster, and then you can use itself and that card to gain 2 cards, so yeah no tone it down a bit. [/quote] Correcting your corrections: -- You don't HAVE to specific where a Special Summon is coming from if it's from the hand unless it's an in-built Special Summon. Special Summons are AUTOMATICALLY from the hand unless you specific the other places. -- You're very wrong about "face-up" needs should be "Face-Up". Capital letters in the game are reserved for "Terms" that are more exclusive to YGO in usage, "face-up" is a generic term and I challenge you to bring up 3 examples in the real game where "face-up" is capitalized when it's NOT the first word of a sentence. -- Death Hunters should be "Death Hunter"(s) because the name is Death Hunter, not Death Hunters or Death Hunter's Plurals aren't directly attached to names, so proper English (and an example is [b][url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Hero_Kid"]Hero Kid[/url][/b]) is the (s). If you want to idiot text it, it should be "Death Hunter" cards (yes, you HAVE to use the quotations anyway), as in "2 "Death Hunter" cards". Problem with this is that "Death Hunter" cards means you can summon anything with Death Hunter in its name and without Death Hunter, it means specifically that name and that card. ------------------------------- The text should be (avoiding bad English): [i]"When this card is Normal Summoned by using 2 Zombie-Type monsters as a Tribute: Special Summon 2 "Death Hunter"(s) to your side of the field."[/i] I refuse to say "Tributing" as it's not a real word, just a word UDE started using on the cards and KDE kept using it to avoid changing it (they also used "used as a Tribute" which is proper English). Maybe in a good Zombie-Type Deck, you might swarm up Zombies to use for this guy, but then, why would you waste good Zombies on such a simple card? And the card isn't even close to OP. You need to have 2 Death Hunters in his hand (and it doesn't say up to 2), so you have to have two. So... basic Zombie scenario: I have an active Zombie World and 2 monsters out (doesn't matter what because they are being treated as Zombies), you have Death Hunter in your hand. If you have all 3 Death Hunter(s) in your hand, are you really going to ditch your two good monsters just to bring out these 3 cards over far better moves? Also, if you only have 1 or 2 Death Hunters in your hand, you can't activate the Special Summon. If it said "up to 2 Death Hunter(s)", it would activate since you only need to summon 1 or even not at all, but it's your choice. The end of this story is, Death Hunter is really just a more overcomplicated [b][url="http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Daybreaker"]Daybreaker[/url][/b]. It's not hard or OP by any definition. It's needs changes to even make it as usable as cards from Labyrinth of Nightmare, let alone compare to cards that exist now. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mounick Posted October 30, 2012 Author Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 Well, the "up to" was made for the reason that it restricts summoning only 1. as for the official OCG, sorry to be crude, I don't care, but if others find it needed, I'll update it, thanks for the feedback Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted October 30, 2012 Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 [quote name='Mounick' timestamp='1351619262' post='6057329'] Well, the "up to" was made for the reason that it restricts summoning only 1. as for the official OCG, sorry to be crude, I don't care, but if others find it needed, I'll update it, thanks for the feedback [/quote]if you don't care about OCG you shouldn't have posted in Realisc Cards, also I guess face-up shouldn't be capitalized, I just thought face-up and face-down was, well thanks for teaching me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Veniet Posted October 30, 2012 Report Share Posted October 30, 2012 [quote name='Mounick' timestamp='1351619262' post='6057329'] Well, the "up to" was made for the reason that it restricts summoning only 1. as for the official OCG, sorry to be crude, I don't care, but if others find it needed, I'll update it, thanks for the feedback [/quote] Its ok to not care, but its quite necessary to update the OCG nowadays. And I'm agreeging with Shinobi Phoenix against Zaziuma concerning the terms and grammar. Allow me to add a small sidenote that though I like the art a bit, its best to use or create arts without white in the background, to make the card more realistic. Allow me also to note I support the idea, and do not think this over powered very much, and I think I'm going to go a little further by expressing the need to at least correct the 'attack mode' to 'attack position'. Other than this, I don't believe much more to be said, and I give a 5/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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