First Cards

[tacc112]

Well, what can I say, my first 2 cards I suppose. One is a card I wanted to make ever since I saw Pegasus play it during his duel with Yugi, so it's not original obviously. And the second is an overpowered god card. So yeah, tell me what ya think.

[img]http://i49.tinypic.com/2ccqe00.jpg[/img]


[img]http://i49.tinypic.com/icnte0.jpg[/img]

This card cannot be normal summoned or set. This card can only be special summoned by tributing 4 monsters on your side of the field. This card cannot be destroyed by spell or trap cards. If your opponent summons a light or dark attribute monster, banish it. If your opponent summons a water or wind attribute monster, negate any special effects. If your opponent summons a fire or earth attribute monster, cut it's ATK in half and deduct that amount from your opponents life points directly. Pay 1000 life points every time this card attacks.

[the48killer]

the trap is nice but the monster it's too much...1.should have divided into 2(light water fire*one effect-dark wind earth*2nd effect) 2.Should have added"cannot be special summoned except by tributing 4 etc" because it can be brought back to the field if in grave or removed from play(if on a card says send to grave it doesn't mean destroyed despite the fact that destroy means send to graveyard).I know it's ironic but all attributes in a description must be written in capitals(LIGHT-DARK-WATER etc.) and improve your OCG(yugioh grammar-there are no special effects-"negate any of their effects").

[tacc112]

Ah, thank you for the comments. while I don't agree with you on your first point about dividing the effects into 2 as this isn't meant to be a completely realistic card I do appreciate the feedback. Can't believe that I didn't capitalize the attributes xp good eye

[Pepperyena]

For your first cards, they're actually pretty nice. That Mermaid one is pretty realistic-ish, but you even said you had an inspiration for it. The monster, on the other hand, seems pretty creative. Your grammar isn't all that bad, and you've made it relatively balanced. My only suggestion is to make its summoning condition harder, such as a Normal Summon with 4 tributes (And perhaps say the normal summon can't be negated.)

But that's just my suggestion. Otherwise, you did great.