My first cards :)

[Supertramp]

Here are the first 3 cards i made. Originally I wanted some kind of unarmed warriors, but I didn't find good pictures, so:

[img]http://i.imgur.com/x3mak.jpg[/img]

When this card is Special Summoned, return this card to the owner's hand. During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent's Life Points. Double any Battle Damage this card inflicts to your opponent.


[img]http://i.imgur.com/SsjAH.jpg[/img]

This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summond except by Tributing 1 "Unarmed War Angel". When this card is Summoned, you can add up to 2 Equip Spell Cards from your Graveyard to your hand. During battle between this attacking card and a Defense Position monster whose DEF is lower than the ATK of this card, inflict the difference as Battle Damage to your opponent's Life Points. Double any Battle Damage this card inflicts to your opponent. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, none of your Equip Spell Cards that equip this card can be removed from the field exept with the effect of "Holy Sword".


[img]http://i.imgur.com/GGUdt.jpg[/img]

You can only equip this card to "Unarmed War Angel" or "Adamant Unarmed War Angel". When this card is activated, destroy all cards that equip the same Monster as this card. As long as this card remains face-up on the field, the equipped Monster cannot be equipped with any other card. The equipped Monster cannot be destroyed by Card Effects and its original ATK becomes 3000. During each of your End Phases you can discard 1 Equip Spell Card or remove 1 Equip Spell Card in your Graveyard from play. If you do not, destroy this card.


Maybe too strong with "Holy Sword"?
Some feedback would be nice

[gimmepie]

I was quite surprised to find such a unique and well balanced set from a first-timer. There is definitely deck potential here if it gets expanded into a full archetype. Now to be more critical...

The first card definitely does not need to be a level 5 monster, nor does it need to go to the hand after being special summoned. Other than that it is fine.
The second seems pretty much balanced fine to me also. I like the search effect although it should maybe only be one equip spell and from the deck not the graveyard. Other than that I cannot fault it.
Your equip is quite good also, although if you follow my suggestion to make this a full archetype it's wording will need to be changed slightly. It would be OP but it has a great limiting effect.


I'd suggest that you need a few more monsters in the set (maybe to return the other two from your graveyard to your hand or field), a few more equip spells and a spell that searches the equip spells (they would all have to be "Holy" equips then really though...). I also think they should be Fairies not Warriors to make the pictures match more. Overall I like what you have done here, especially with some minor changed and expansion. They have some similarities to Vylons but manage to be unique still. Good work.

[Supertramp]

Thanks for your extensive reply, I'm glad you like it Well I used to draw Yugioh cards when I was younger, so not really my first time
Aaah you're right, they should be fairies, I just forgot that monster type. I also agree with your critisism on the first card.
I'm actually not sure if I would change the 2nd one, also depends on if I make a full archetype or how i would make it.
Maybe I'll make it a full archetype (then I would update the changes), but I'm working on full archetype right now and i'm already planning another

[gimmepie]

Fair enough I'm in the same situation (Although a lot of archetypes die as of late o.O). I'll keep checking to see what you do with these.