NuuP Posted November 20, 2012 Report Share Posted November 20, 2012 This is my first cards ever. [attachment=35731:CyberHydra.jpg] [attachment=35733:CyberOverhaul.jpg] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pepperyena Posted November 21, 2012 Report Share Posted November 21, 2012 I think you mean "These" are your first cards? Alright, let's get started. Hmmm.. Oh, that's definitely overpowered. If you're going to have indeterminate ATK, make it "?" instead of "X000". Either way, 2000 for every card on the field is ridiculous, considering this monster's ease of summoning. All you need are 2 tributes or 2000 Life Points for Mausoleum of the Emperor. With an ATK stat that high, capable of reaching easily 10,000+, being able to attack three times is just overkill. Making your hand empty is easy, as well, not to mention this card can just be resummoned from the graveyard. Maybe that's some tips to work on - make things more balanced, instead of just giant overlord boss monsters all the time. The "can't be destroyed by battle" effect is just kind of unnecessary considering its massive ATK and DEF. The trap card effect is also just kind of... I can see where you're coming from, but it's weird. It's like a continuous effect that burns your opponent just to get rid of this already powerful card. And with the massive ATK this thing has, it's kinda overkill again. The equip is rather out of place, and it seems like it would work better as a different type of card. Unless, of course, the equip getting destroyed will remove the boost yet still destroy it during the end phase, which is relatively balanced... but doubling the ATK of something that can already easily go beyond 10,000 is ridiculous! I get that it's your first cards and all, but I hope this helps you on the path to making more balanced cards. Be mindful of how difficult things are to get out, and try to experiment with other types of cards. Oh yeah - and try to improve on card grammar. It's already okay, but you have a few misspelled words here and there. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NuuP Posted November 22, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2012 Thanks!Nice tips.I will try to make something better in the next few days. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NuuP Posted November 22, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2012 http://imageshack.us/photo/my-images/546/50961948.jpg/ Here are my new cards.Hope they are better. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Pepperyena Posted November 22, 2012 Report Share Posted November 22, 2012 Dark Forest: Really not fond of this one, since its wordings state that it reduces ALL monster's DEF to 0, and 500 LP isn't a very big cost to double the ATK of all DARKs. Demon Knight: The summoning conditions are a little meh, but they work. It's not over-powerful or anything. What I don't understand is the maintenance cost. You're forced to either discard your entire hand, or.... gain 1000 LP? Why not just have a "Gain 1000 Life Points during each of your End Phases"? That would make this card decently balanced, due to its ATK and summonability. Demon Princess: Despite being simple, it works. You may want to tone down the destroyed by battle effect, such as it only happens once - or - twice - per turn. Other than that, it seems like it's good for a set, since it summons another monster Demon Prince: Hmm, okay... Maybe a tad bit overpowered, due to easily gaining ATK and attacking more than once, but not very much. The thing that gets me is "When your opponent destroys". I guess you mean by battle, card, or effect? If so, then okay. I can at least see it working. The Fallen One: Okay, so it's a fusion between the 3 monsters. Considering it requires 3 specific materials, it's not really that good. Sure, it can reach high ATK and all, but in order to attack directly, it requires you to either discard a card or pay 1000 LP? Not really worth it in my book. Not to mention it doesn't have any other effects or anything. Shadow Blade and Dark Forest were probably in mind for these three monsters, but "doubling ATK" isn't really a good thing to work with, unless the effect is very hard to get off. I'd suggest that, instead of paying half your LP and doubling the ATK, it's something that has less of a cost and less of an effect, for more balance or so. Crazy sacrificial stuff like that still exists, though, so don't worry. Also, your grammar isn't really up-to-date with the official card grammar, but you have the right mindset. That's all. This isn't realistic cards or anything, so you're fine. Better than a lot people I've seen on here. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
NuuP Posted November 22, 2012 Author Report Share Posted November 22, 2012 Fixed them a little bit and reuploaded.And sorry for the grammar because im not very good at english especially on grammar. http://imageshack.us/g/1/9882646/ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
terranova3295 Posted November 26, 2012 Report Share Posted November 26, 2012 Here are my first cards, mainly just from characters I like...please critique as you see fit ^^; [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2ju6h7Mk1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2jullFLI1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2juuhtpr1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2jvmAmZT1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2jwmVOVe1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2jwyrGmh1qd1weg.jpg[/img] [img]http://media.tumblr.com/tumblr_me2jx7zOca1qd1weg.jpg[/img] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JSRFSonicHeadDX Posted November 30, 2012 Report Share Posted November 30, 2012 [quote name='Pepperyena' timestamp='1353462057' post='6074465'] I think you mean "These" are your first cards? Alright, let's get started. Hmmm.. Oh, that's definitely overpowered. If you're going to have indeterminate ATK, make it "?" instead of "X000". Either way, 2000 for every card on the field is ridiculous, considering this monster's ease of summoning. All you need are 2 tributes or 2000 Life Points for Mausoleum of the Emperor. With an ATK stat that high, capable of reaching easily 10,000+, being able to attack three times is just overkill. Making your hand empty is easy, as well, not to mention this card can just be resummoned from the graveyard. Maybe that's some tips to work on - make things more balanced, instead of just giant overlord boss monsters all the time. The "can't be destroyed by battle" effect is just kind of unnecessary considering its massive ATK and DEF. The trap card effect is also just kind of... I can see where you're coming from, but it's weird. It's like a continuous effect that burns your opponent just to get rid of this already powerful card. And with the massive ATK this thing has, it's kinda overkill again. The equip is rather out of place, and it seems like it would work better as a different type of card. Unless, of course, the equip getting destroyed will remove the boost yet still destroy it during the end phase, which is relatively balanced... but doubling the ATK of something that can already easily go beyond 10,000 is ridiculous! I get that it's your first cards and all, but I hope this helps you on the path to making more balanced cards. Be mindful of how difficult things are to get out, and try to experiment with other types of cards. Oh yeah - and try to improve on card grammar. It's already okay, but you have a few misspelled words here and there. [/quote] Your talking about balanced card where it's "Any Other Cards" Forum . Technically Balance doesn't matter here but, I will say that your right about the grammer being off. I will give credit where it is needed and also say in a "Realistic Cards" stand point, it's OP. But none the less it's just fan cards.. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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