Among the S.T.A.R.s

[Legendary Dragon]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]The S.T.A.R. archetype is separated into 3 groups.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Yellow S.T.A.R.s - Humanoid beings, Warriors, Spellcasters and Psychics. They are Effect Monsters.[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Blue S.T.A.R.s - Beast-like beings, Beasts, Reptiles and Winged-Beasts. They are Effect Monsters as well.[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]And finally, Red S.T.A.R.s, the Xyz Monsters of this archetype. They are mainly a combination of the two, as such they are inhabited by Beast-Warriors, Dragons and Fairies.[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]All the members are FIRE-attribute.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Their effects are exclusive to which group they belong to, but the difference isn't that big. Blue S.T.A.R.s special summon their Yellow counterparts from the deck or hand and vice versa. They have a second effect that activates when they are used for an Xyz Summon of their Red betters.[/background][/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][background=rgb(251, 253, 254)]Blue S.T.A.R.s[/background][/size][/font][/color]
[spoiler:Sniperdog][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145363.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Blue S.T.A.R. - Sniperdog[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Beast / Effect / FIRE / Level 3][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/700 DEF/600[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Yellow S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, it gains 700 ATK.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Tankgriffin][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145365.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Blue S.T.A.R. - Tankgriffin[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Winged-Beast / Effect / FIRE / Level 4][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/1000 DEF/800[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Yellow S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, target face-up 1 monster your opponent controls; reduce it's DEF by 1000, change it to the face-up defense position, and have this Xyz Monster deal piercing damage to that monster.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Spychameleon][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145370.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Blue S.T.A.R. - Spychameleon[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Reptile / Effect / FIRE / Level 2][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/200 DEF/200[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Yellow S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, while this card is attached as an overlay unit, it can attack your opponent directly.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]

Yellow S.T.A.R.s
[spoiler:Knifesoldier][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145371.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Yellow S.T.A.R. - Knifesoldier[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Warrior / Effect / FIRE / Level 4][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/1500 DEF/1000[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Blue S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, target 1 face-up monster your opponent controls; banish it until the end phase of this turn.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Staffmage][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145372.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Yellow S.T.A.R. - Staffmage[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Spellcaster / Effect / FIRE / Level 3][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/500 DEF/500[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Blue S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, add 1 "S.T.A.R." Spell card from your deck.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Shotgunseer][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145375.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Yellow S.T.A.R. - Shotgunseer[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Psychic / Effect / FIRE / Level 2][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/100 DEF/800[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]When this card is Normal Summoned, you can Special Summon 1 "Blue S.T.A.R." monster from your deck or hand. You can only gain this effect once per turn. A "S.T.A.R." Xyz Monster that was Summoned using this card as Xyz Material gains this effect.[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● When it is Xyz Summoned, select 1 face-down monster your opponent controls; Flip Summon it and negate it's effects.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]

Red S.T.A.R.s
[spoiler:General LeoBladesman][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145351.jpg[/img][color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Red S.T.A.R. - General Leobladesman[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Beast-Warrior / Xyz / Effect / FIRE / Rank 3][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/1600 DEF/1000[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]2 Level 3 monsters[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Once per turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; Target 1 face-up monster your opponent controls, and inflict damage equal to it's ATK. This card cannot attack during the turn you activate this effect.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Battleship Dragocatapult][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145353.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Red S.T.A.R. - Battleship Dragocatapult[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Dragon / Xyz / Effect / FIRE / Rank 4][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/2500 DEF/2000[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]2 Level 4 monsters[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]During either player's turn: You can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; Until the end phase of this turn, this card cannot be destroyed in battle, and if this card battles, destroy the other monster after the damage calculation. Any monster destroyed by this effect is equipped to this card. Once per turn you can send equipped monster to the graveyard, and deal damage to your opponent equal to their Rank/Level x200.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]
[spoiler:Royal Pistolmaster][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145358.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Red S.T.A.R. - Royal Pistolmaster[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3][Fairy / Xyz / Effect / FIRE / Rank 2][/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]ATK/1000 DEF/1000[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]2 Level 2 monsters[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]If this card deals battle damage to your opponent, you can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card; discard 1 random card from your opponent's hand and deal damage based on what that card was:[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● Monster: Inflict 500 damage to your opponent.[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● Spell: Inflict 700 damage to your opponent.[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]● Trap: Inflict 900 damage to your opponent.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]

Spells
[spoiler:S.T.A.R. Recruitment][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145376.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]S.T.A.R. Recruitment[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Normal Spell[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Add 1 "S.T.A.R." Monster from your deck to your hand. You can only activate 1 "S.T.A.R. Recruitment" once per turn.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]

Traps
[spoiler:S.T.A.R. Ambush][img]http://yugico.com/customcard/145378.jpg[/img]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]S.T.A.R. Ambush[/size][/font][/color]
[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]Counter Trap[/size][/font][/color]

[color=#5A5A5A][font=tahoma, helvetica, arial, sans-serif][size=3]While you have 1 or more face-up "S.T.A.R." monster(s) on the field, if your opponent activates a Trap/Spell card, negate the activation and destroy that card.[/size][/font][/color][/spoiler]

What do you think?

[Shinobi Phoenix]

The images aren't showing and you didn't list any of the Lore separate with the spoilers, so yeah, sorry, you'll have to fix that if you're wondering why no one has posted anything, even if people do so rarely post responses in the first place.


Incidentally, what is the story and concept to this or is it just a random theme?

[Legendary Dragon]

They aren't? Hm. They're working fine for me, but I'll take your word for it. Maybe it something to do with the way I presented the images. I'll put the lore up, my apologies.

Apparently Yugico is down. For the meantime, I'll post the written versions and once it's up again I'll post the images on something like imgur/photobucket.

Bump, and to answer your question they're basically a futuristic army who use solar energy to power up their weapons.

[Shinobi Phoenix]

For all 3 Blue STAR's and all 3 Yellow STAR's:

- Change "[u][i]You can only gain this effect once per turn.[/i][/u]" to "[i][u][b]This effect of [*Insert monster name here*] can only be activated once per turn.[/b][/u][/i]"
-- This is because the text you are using is not only grammatically incorrect, but mechanically incorrect for the effect it is referring to. "Summon-Trigger" effects are already technically once per turn as they only happen when Summoned. So the only way they happen again is when leave the field (which also resets the tradition "Once-Per-Turn" limit of cards, similar to banishing them temporarily or flipping them face-down), this is especially true of Normal-Summon-Triggers which are already once per turn as you can only Normal Summon once per turn outside of effects. Putting the restriction on the effect coming from any COPY of that card is the correct limitation on this sort of effect (as it prevents the card and any card with its name, which includes itself when it leaves and returns) from using the effect again that turn. I know it seems complicated but this is the correct way.



No comment yet on the card's individual effects, but so far it's all rather tame I'm afraid. For example, there's nothing special, different, interesting, powerful or thematic about "S.T.A.R. Ambush". It's just a free Dark Bribe, it could be attached to any theme with a name change and there's no theme to the card itself at all. Actually looking over the whole thing, I don't see what's very thematic about it. The Xyz's don't care two rat tails about the STAR's, and the STAR's give their effects to any Xyz and the effects themselves are very typical and random. I guess that's another reason I was asking about the story and concept.

I don't see any concept.

Who are the STAR's, why are they fighting, who are they fighting, how do they fight, what makes how they fight different from the tactics and weapons of their enemies?

In other words, it feels like another "pictures first, card and theme later" sort of project.

Sorry.


As far as the theme itself as a [u][b]DECK[/b][/u], I can see you're supposed to quickly yank out a STAR of a matching Level to quickly overrun with Xyz (possibly Synchros if you have Tuners in the Deck). So the theme is sound as a DECK, but a rather boring theme without anything very special or thematically pleasing or different from what exists in the real game and I'm fairly sure there's a few Decks in the real game that work like this (I believe Sacreds (TCG: Constellars) are similar).



-- EDIT: A comment about Shogunseer. You can't Flip Summon an opponent's monster, it needs to just say Flip it face-up (like Book of Taiyou). Until Konami does it, this isn't a precedent you can set. Why do you NEED to Flip Summon it, especially if you are negating the effects anyway? Would you be triggering cards off of it that look for Summons (like Torrential Tribute)?

Also, the possessive of a neutral gender object is "its", not "it's", "it's" is still the contraction of "it is" in the English language. One of those exceptions to rules that English is full of.

[Legendary Dragon]

Thank you for the review, I'll use the information you gave me right away!

In terms of the story, I haven't *really* thought about it, but the way I see it is that they're not exactly fighting anyone, maybe they're something like intergalactical police officers or whatever. As for the other things you mentioned, I have no clue, do you have any ideas?

[Legendary Dragon]

Bumping this!