my first card post please comment

[warlock3096]

my first tell me what you think

[Professor Tetsu]

I really like the idea, but there are a few things that could be taken into consideration. Firstly, you should really work on your grammar...you know, like capitalizing the first letter of a sentence and stuff like that. Secondly, your OCG is...lacking. Let me show you what I mean. Rather than "a creature of retribution. can only be summoned wher you have no cards in your hand remove. 2 cards from play in your graveyard. increase this cards defense by half of the removed from play cards attack" you could say "This monster can only be Summoned when you have no cards in your Hand. You may remove 2 monsters from play to increase the DEF of this monster by half the ATK of the monsters removed from play." Now, the question begs: Is this a Normal Monster or an Effect Monster? It looks like you're trying to make an Effect Monster using a Normal Monster Template. One more thing about your effect: You need to put caps on it. How long does this status boost last? How often can this effect be used? One last thing: the name could use a little...sprucing up. Rather than just "Destroyer," you could call it something like "The Great Destroyer." Just an idea. For my rating for this card, I give it a...drum roll please...4/10. This card has amazing potential. I can't wait to see future cards. I'm sure that, if you take my above points into consideration, your cards will be AMAZING! I hope I didn't come across as rude.

[warlock3096]

thanks for the advice bud

this is my second card i tried making a magic card

[Professor Tetsu]

Not bad. Not bad at all. You're certainly improving! I'm not sure that this is the wisest idea. I mean, one could feasibly be able to Special Summon a monster that is Level 18, ya know? Maybe tribute two monsters? Just a thought. My rating: 8/10. Great improvement!