brown_thing Posted March 2, 2013 Report Share Posted March 2, 2013 [spoiler='Saber-Tech Lion'] [spoiler='Lore']1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters Once per turn, if you control this monster on the field, you can equip it to a face-up Machine-Type monster on your side of the field as an Equip Card, OR unequip it and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. When equipped to a monster by this card's effect, that monster gains 2500 ATK. (1 monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, this card is destroyed instead.)[/spoiler][/spoiler] Brother helped me with OCG. Need Constructive Criticism, please! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L0SS Posted March 2, 2013 Report Share Posted March 2, 2013 You need to put the Synchro summon requirements. 2500 ATK increase is pretty damn high, but I ain't sure if that is a good or bad thing. Think a semi-colon should be used instead of the second comma. I also think you should edit the line about attack to: "While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains 2500 ATK.", as that is a slightly simplified, and corrected version of the OCG. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
brown_thing Posted March 2, 2013 Author Report Share Posted March 2, 2013 Like this? [spoiler='Lore']1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters Once per turn, if you control this monster on the field; you can equip it to a face-up Machine-Type monster on your side of the field as an Equip Card, OR unequip it and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains 1500 ATK. (1 monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, this card is destroyed instead.)[/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L0SS Posted March 2, 2013 Report Share Posted March 2, 2013 Like this? [spoiler='Lore']1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters Once per turn, if you control this monster on the field; you can equip it to a face-up Machine-Type monster on your side of the field as an Equip Card, OR unequip it and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains 1000 ATK. (1 monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, this card is destroyed instead.)[/spoiler] Spot on. I think making it a level 5 gives you a nice area to play with. Now, I may conflict with my previous statement when I say you should increase it's attack a little, and increase the gain it gives. Maybe make it's attack 2300, and it's gain around 1500. Making it 1000 is too low, as Armory Arm does the same thing. Btw, you can edit your first post instead of reposting the edited card, so you don't clog up the page. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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