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Bird Archetype (Need Constructive Criticism)


Zeth525

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No hate please this is my first post :)

 

 

 

[attachment=37963:Princess Bird.jpg]

 

The cards mainly revolve around this card and protecting her to get cards to your hand.

 

[attachment=37959:Bird Soldier.jpg]

 

This card adds a small bit of protection to the main card and when he dies you get another one to your hand.

 

[attachment=37960:Bird Guardian.jpg]

 

This card is my favorite out of the lot. He acts like a Queen Dragun Djinn for Winged-Beasts and when a Winged-Beast you control is destroyed by battle you can special summon him from your hand, kinda like a Gorz.

 

[attachment=37964:Thunder Bird.jpg]

 

IDK about this card too much, kinda like a tour guide but you only can special summon from hand. It's an instant rank 4 XYZ. I need help with him i think, to over powered maybe IDK what do you guys think?

 

[attachment=37961:Blue Bird Guard.jpg]

 

I like this card, not to hard to get out and he gains 600 for every "Princess Bird" the one thing i need to change is the wording. I wanna make it say that it only works for just 1 "Princess Bird" cuz if you had 3 on the field he's 4200 ATk and thats really OP, anyone know how i can word it better to where it only works once if that makes any sense?

 

[attachment=37962:Fire Bird Guard.jpg]

 

Wasn't sure what to make this guys eff. He had the same art style as "Blue Bird Guard" so i gave him the same 1st eff but the second one was just eh. I wanted to make the deck revolve around unlimited resources and this card got things from the grave back to your hand which is kinda nice.

 

[attachment=37958:Bird Evacuation.jpg]

 

IDK what to say about this card. I honestly based it off the art so i thought it looked like a compulse for this archetype.

 

 

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For Fire Bird Guard I would use the same wording that you had for your Blue Bird Guard.  "This card gains 600 ATK  while you control a face-up "Princess Bird"." 

 

As far as the technical aspects of the wording goes the key seems to be saying ...A face-up "Princess Bird".  The letter A implies single versus you putting down "for EVERY "Princess Bird", meaning plural.  Hope this helps more then it confuses.

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First off cool artwork. Second bird soldier is pretty cool i don't think cards can bring themselves(or twins lets say) are allowed. You got to remember you only have 5 spaces and if you can put to many down sure the other player can lose but you'll  be stuck and not able to put to many cards down. But hey!! its your fantasy deck...

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Thanks for the feedback!

 

Lanter000: The reason i didn't give them both the same effects is i wanted them to be different. Like why have two of the same card eff just different art? I just don't know what to put xD and thanks for the card tech on Blue Bird that makes more sense now :D

 

Thepilgrim88: Thanks for the compliment! :D And Soldier Bird's eff adds another one from your deck to your hand not the field. I was going along the lines of getting Rank 4 XYZ's on the field quick. The only problem is you can't make XYZ's on this site and i can't find any pictures of the same art style to make the XYZs.

 

BlackRoseQueen: I know what u mean that's why i asked for help xD i have the tendency to make cards to powerful than making them fair. It's a lot harder than i thought it would be xD but then again Konami made Elemental Dragons haha. And i'm new to this so what do you mean by lore? Like the cards back story?

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Thanks for the feedback!

 

Lanter000: The reason i didn't give them both the same effects is i wanted them to be different. Like why have two of the same card eff just different art? I just don't know what to put xD and thanks for the card tech on Blue Bird that makes more sense now :D

 

Thepilgrim88: Thanks for the compliment! :D And Soldier Bird's eff adds another one from your deck to your hand not the field. I was going along the lines of getting Rank 4 XYZ's on the field quick. The only problem is you can't make XYZ's on this site and i can't find any pictures of the same art style to make the XYZs.

 

BlackRoseQueen: I know what u mean that's why i asked for help xD i have the tendency to make cards to powerful than making them fair. It's a lot harder than i thought it would be xD but then again Konami made Elemental Dragons haha. And i'm new to this so what do you mean by lore? Like the cards back story?

The card effect. And I think giving them a higher cost to activate things would help, like banishing instead of destroying.

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