XYZ Storm

[outlaw1994]

a trap to help get rid of those pesky xyzs like ophion big-eye and more

 

When your opponent Xyz Summons a Rank 4 or higher monster, banish the top 2 cards of your Deck: Detach all Xyz Material attached to the Xyz monster and inflict damage to your opponent equal to the Rank of that monster x 300.

[Therrion]

"When your opponent Xyz Summons a Rank 4 or higher monster, banish the top card of your Deck: Detach all Xyz Material attached to the Xyz monster and inflict damage to your opponent equal to the combined Level of its materials x 200."

While remaining slightly wrong, still is a better way to word what you were going for with this card. I like it, especially that it requires a Rank 4 or higher, making it similar to "Trap Holes" in a sense that the monster needs to be threatening enough, so to say, to trigger something of this caliber in response. It is rather punishing, as a Rank 5 with two material is 1/4th of the starting life total, and Rank 8 monsters have their controllers suffer 3200 damage for a Summon, which is a little to much for a single card to inflict. I think a max damage should be placed on this card, like: "This card can only inflict up to 2000 damage this way." or some kind of prohibiting factor.

[outlaw1994]

maybe i should instead of the combine level maybe make it the rank of the xyz monster

something like this

"When your opponent Xyz Summons a Rank 4 or higher monster, banish the top card of your Deck: Detach all Xyz Material attached to the Xyz monster and inflict damage to your opponent equal to the Rank of that monster x 200."

[Therrion]

If you tread down that path to help the card reach its balance, then make it "x 300" instead, as you still want some sort of damage dealt, and 800 for a Rank 4 isn't to good, while 1200 is much better. It would have to trigger on a Rank 7 for 2100, which is way better then the old 2800. Or you could leave it at x 200, just to ensure 100% that it is at the power level it needs to be without "pushing it".

[outlaw1994]

ok i will update it to 300 :) and also bump

[outlaw1994]

bump

[OpticalGalaxyStar]

 Overall, XYZ Storm is a really nice card. It would be a really efficient counter to XYZ's in my Deck. (:D) The only bug I can see with it is the fact that you can Banish only 1 card from the top of your Deck to seriously cripple an XYZ (by removing XYZ Units) and inflict (possibly) some pretty nice damage to your opponent. This is too low a price to pay, from my point of view. I think you should Increase the number of Banished cards to 2-3, just to add a tad bit of balance to this card. :)

 

Other than that, this is a well-made and not just something someone whipped up in 2.5 minutes. The overall card grammar is excellent, and you supplied a really nice picture.

 

My current rating: 8.3/10

[outlaw1994]

thanks so you think update it to 2 cards banished or should i make it banished facedown cause once banished facedown no card can bring it back

[AdamX]

Building on what Optical was saying, I think it'd be cool if you could choose how many cards to banish to increase the effect of the trap.

 

For Example 

 

When your opponent Xyz Summons a Rank 4 or higher monster banish 1-3 cards from the top of your deck and apply the following effect(s);

1 Card Banished -  Detach all Xyz Material attached to the Xyz monster

2 Cards Banished - Inflict damage to your opponent equal to the Rank of that monster x 200

3 Cards Banished - This card's effect cannot be negated

[outlaw1994]

i might think a bout it anyone else bump

[outlaw1994]

bump

[outlaw1994]

bump

[liavcol]

I like this card very much, also I think that you should change the cost to 2 cards cause really, 1 is nothing to it's effect and 3 is a lot to risk for a single Xyz monster, among thos 3 cards there is a higher possibility that you'll banish a card like Monster Reborn or Mirror Force which are essential cards...

[outlaw1994]

lol 2 cards sounds perfect i will change it thanks :)