OpticalGalaxyStar Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 Ladies and Gentleman, Slendermen and Endermen, Children of all ages! Now presenting: The one...The only... DARK CRYSTAL LEVIATHAN!!!!!!!! So yeah. OpticalGalaxyStar here, with a brand new card, straight off the drawing board! I plan on using it in a future fanfiction I'm going to write, and It'll be the signature card of the fanfiction's main character. So...without further ado...here it is. Dark Cystal Leviathan DARK-Attribute Level 7 Dragon / Synchro / Effect 2400/2000 1 Tuner + 1 or more non-Tuner Dragon-Type monsters Once per turn, You can Banish 1 Dragon-Type monster in your Graveyard; This card gains ATK equal to the half of the Banished card's original ATK, until the End Phase. Anyway, CnC is appreciated, it helps me improve my YGO card making skills. A lot. :D (Please note that I updated the original card. I decreased the original ATK/DEF so it wouldn't be as OP, as well as the effect.) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ice Kirby Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 I sort of like this card. It's a simple yet effective card, and goes straight to the point. But it is super OP, even with the DEF points. Change it to something like "Once per turn; You can banish 1 Dragon-Type monster in your Graveyard; This card gains ATK equal to half the Banished's card's original ATK, until the End Phase." This would make it less freaking OP as heck and more of a unique card. Overall , 8.3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OpticalGalaxyStar Posted June 19, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 :) I guess it is kinda OP...But, I do like your suggestion of obtaining half the Banished monster's ATK...I'll change that. Thanks for the review, Ice Kirby! :) EDIT: I made the suggested changes by Ice Kirby. Check em' out, bro! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Ice Kirby Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 Yeah, it looks much better now. You could lower the life point pay to 500, or you could just raise it to 2000 and make it so you get all of the dragon's ATK points :P Overall a nice card now, straight to the point. 9.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OpticalGalaxyStar Posted June 19, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 OMGOMGOMG 9.5!!!!!!!!!! YESSSSSSSSSSSSSS *ahem* Yes, of course. I myself think the LP price should be lower as well. I'll get right to it. :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
thesynchrohero Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 Post Little Crystal Dragon, you could have the best card in the world but if the Summoning conditions are rubish no one will use it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkhorus Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 Great card :) I like the picture of the dragon especially, and the effect is written correctly grammar-wise, which is very important. Everything else is also in order. I agree with Ice Kirby, you could lower the LP pay to 500... or even drop it altogether and this card still wouldn't be OP, imho. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OpticalGalaxyStar Posted June 19, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 thesynchrohero: Actually, I think I'm going to drop Little Crystal Dragon altogether. It's just kind of complicating things. :) darkhorus: Hmmm...Yeah, I suppose so. I'll take out the LP cost. And also...How can you have 59 points, but only 1 post...? That just seems kinda weird to me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkhorus Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 thesynchrohero: Actually, I think I'm going to drop Little Crystal Dragon altogether. It's just kind of complicating things. :) darkhorus: Hmmm...Yeah, I suppose so. I'll take out the LP cost. And also...How can you have 59 points, but only 1 post...? That just seems kinda weird to me. LOL Well, the answer to that is simple, my only posts so far, except these 2 here, have been in the AoC section, which doesn't add to post count :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
OpticalGalaxyStar Posted June 19, 2013 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 ...Oh. I have absolutely no clue what AoC is. *shrugs* Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
darkhorus Posted June 19, 2013 Report Share Posted June 19, 2013 ...Oh. I have absolutely no clue what AoC is. *shrugs* AoC = Any Other Cards :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Therrion Posted June 21, 2013 Report Share Posted June 21, 2013 Honestly, I don't suggest this as the main card in a fanfiction. If the main monster of any protaginist thus far was this card, I would be ashamed. The main card should be interesting. While this card is decent, it lacks in the interesting factor, as it is a straight up beat down monster with Red-Eyes stats. I would rather use Strong Wind Dragon (which gains half the tributes ATK permanently). This card is only strong on your turn, which I guess is fine on a Lv. 7. One thing I want to say is make it generic. Remove the fact the non-Tuner requires Dragon-Type and that the ATK boost also requires a Dragon-Type. That is not only to increase the all around playability of this card (which would make it playable, as in some scenarios you will want a quick one turn beatstick), but also to Gets somewhat offtopic here: make whatever fanfic you wish to write more interesting. You shouldn't limit the main character to one Type of monster. All main characters as of late have had generic monsters that have become great staples in Decks of today. It wouldn't be interesting to read a Dragon player's fanfic, imo. But really, your fanfic is up to you. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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