Lucas the Flame Posted July 8, 2013 Report Share Posted July 8, 2013 [spoiler='Evo Beast'][spoiler='Evo Beast - Sukicagi'][spoiler='Lore']When this card is summoned: you may banish any "Evo Beast" from your graveyard and special summon a monster of the same name from your deck or hand.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - Sonic Bird'][spoiler='Lore']When this card enters the battle field: add any "Evo Beast" to your deck from your grave. Then shuffle your deck.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - SubShark'][spoiler='Lore']Once during ether player's turn: you may negate one attack and add one banish "Evo Beast" to your deck.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - Dragon of Chaos'][spoiler='Lore']There can only be one "Evo Beast - Dragon of Chaos" or "Evo Beast - Dragon of Control" on ether side of the field.You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by banishing 2 "Evo Beast" monsters from your Graveyard. Once per turn if this card would be destroyed: banish one " Evo Beast" from your grave.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - Solar Pegasis'][spoiler='Lore']1 "Evo Beast" tuner + 1 non-tuner beast type During the end phase, unless you sacrifice one "Evo Beast": send this card back to your extra deck and add the syncro material monsters to your hand.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - Draco Knight'][spoiler='Lore']When this card is banished (from anywhere): add it to your hand instead.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Herald the Dragons'][spoiler='Lore']You may sacrifice one "Evo Beast - Draco Knight" and one " Herald of the Celestial" to summon any "Evo - Beast" fusion monster or any "Celestial" fusion monster from the extra deck to the field.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Evo Beast - Dragon of Control'][spoiler='Lore']There can only be one "Evo Beast - Dragon of Chaos" or "Evo Beast - Dragon of Control" on ether side of the field. You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by returning 2 banished "Evo Beast" monsters to your grave. Once per turn if this card would be destroyed: return one banished " Evo Beast" to your grave instead.[/spoiler][/spoiler][spoiler='Celestial Dragon - Muraki the Destructive'][spoiler='Lore']This card can only be fusion summoned using Herald the Dragon. This card can not be targeted by an effect while in the grave. Once per game: add all banished cards to their owner's deck.[/spoiler][/spoiler][/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted July 8, 2013 Report Share Posted July 8, 2013 Well, I sure hope this is a work in progress, since there's not really a lot to say about these right now. I guess I'll go over them 1 by 1:Sukicagi: Since this card is the main thing to get these going, I need to talk about this first. Right now, this card can become pretty insane. If you mill a ton with Lightsworn, you can pull out a lot of monsters with this guy, which I don't really like. I think you should change this card to something else.Sonic Bird: Well, I don't really get why you want this, I suppose it adds the cards you want back in the Deck if you Lightsworn, but it is still out of place here I feel. Is handy at times though, but since it doesn't do anything else, I find it kinda worthless.Subshark: Why bother posting this when you don't have anything for it? And no, I'm not gonna help you, you are the one who is suppose to come up with the effect, if you have no idea what your Archetype is going for, then you shouldn't post it yet.Dragon: Well, it's currently only a beatstick. If you could pull multiple out with the last guy, it would be insane, but it's still not good that you have that guy to begin with. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas the Flame Posted July 9, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 - Update - -2 cards updated -1 card added [more soon] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Althemia Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 Please post the lores underneath the cards. Thanks! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas the Flame Posted July 9, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 Please post the lores underneath the cards. Thanks! I added the lore Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zazubat Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 I added the lore You messed up, the two last don't have images. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanea Posted July 9, 2013 Report Share Posted July 9, 2013 Just going by the card that I can see (the last two images aren't working), I would say that your future cards in this series should focus on supplying the Graveyard with a consistent feed of "Evo Beast" monsters, since the ones that you currently have seem to really toolbox it. I hope to see the rest of this archetype soon! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas the Flame Posted July 10, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2013 - update - - fixed pics that weren't working - re-added 1 card - added 2 cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanea Posted July 10, 2013 Report Share Posted July 10, 2013 I'm really liking how this series is shaping up. Only a few things I wanted to point out. You have no alternate Summoning condition for playing your more powerful cards, and Tribute Summoning is usually far too slow, unless the entire archetype is centered around Tribute Summoning. I would suggest adding to "Dragon of Chaos": "You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by banishing 2 "Evo Beast" monsters from your hand and/or Graveyard". That would make him less of a dead draw and make an appearance much more often. I like the effect of "Draco Knight", but again, Tribute Summoning can be very difficult from the get go sometimes. I would consider reducing his ATK to 1600 - 1900 and making him Level 4. I think he could see much more play that way without being a free beatstick that pluses off the costs of your other monsters. Finally, I don't think "Sonic Bird" can carry all of that Graveyard demand on his shoulders. I love his design, and I think that another card with a similar Graveyard toolboxing effect would support this archetype very nicely. Can't wait to see more! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas the Flame Posted July 10, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 10, 2013 I'm really liking how this series is shaping up. Only a few things I wanted to point out. You have no alternate Summoning condition for playing your more powerful cards, and Tribute Summoning is usually far too slow, unless the entire archetype is centered around Tribute Summoning. I would suggest adding to "Dragon of Chaos": "You can Special Summon this card (from your hand) by banishing 2 "Evo Beast" monsters from your hand and/or Graveyard". That would make him less of a dead draw and make an appearance much more often. I like the effect of "Draco Knight", but again, Tribute Summoning can be very difficult from the get go sometimes. I would consider reducing his ATK to 1600 - 1900 and making him Level 4. I think he could see much more play that way without being a free beatstick that pluses off the costs of your other monsters. Finally, I don't think "Sonic Bird" can carry all of that Graveyard demand on his shoulders. I love his design, and I think that another card with a similar Graveyard toolboxing effect would support this archetype very nicely. Can't wait to see more! Thanks for the suggestions, and I will be using two of them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas the Flame Posted July 11, 2013 Author Report Share Posted July 11, 2013 - Update - - Update two cards (thanks Chaos Affinity for the suggestions) - Added two cards Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanea Posted July 11, 2013 Report Share Posted July 11, 2013 The wording on "Dragon of Chaos" doesn't prevent his destruction; it just banishes another monster when he is destroyed. Not sure if that is what you were aiming for. Just add "instead" to the end, and he'll have a built in self protection. c: And where is "Herald of the Celestial"? It's mentioned in one of your cards, but it isn't there. Hope to see it! Also, I think that I will enjoy "Herald of the Dragons" depending on how "Herald of the Celestial" turns out. It's really nice way to explode with boss monsters while maintaining an equally difficult to fulfill condition. And "Muraki" ... xD dat Level 12, gotta love it. I like his huge recycling capability, which comes with its own drawbacks of decreased draw consistency. Well-balanced and fun. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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