Devack Posted July 11, 2013 Report Share Posted July 11, 2013 [spoiler Monsters] [spoiler Fero] While this card is face up on the field, Frozen Heart Monsters can not be targeted by card effects. When this card is Summoned: You can remove Frozen Counters from your side of the field; destroy an equal number of cards on the field. You cannot conduct your Battle Phase the turn you activate this effect. [/spoiler] [Spoiler Gia] When this card is special summoned by the effects of a frozen heart monster target one monster on the field and return it to its owners hand. [/spoiler] [spoiler Kel] When the effect of a frozen Heart Monster is activated you can special summon this card from your hand [/spoiler] [spoiler Lynx] When this card is special summoned to the field by the effect of a Frozen heart monster target one Frozen heart Monster in your Graveyard and shuffle it back into the deck. [/spoiler] [spoiler Nxy] When this card is destroyed (by battle or card effect) and sent to the graveyard Special summon one level 4 or lower Frozen Heart Monster from your deck in Def position. [/spoiler] [spoiler Reo] Discard this card from your hand to the graveyard to add one Frozen spell from the deck to the hand. [/spoiler] [spoiler Rez] If this card is targeted by an opponent's card effect Add two Frozen heart monster from your deck to your hand [/spoiler] [spoiler Shiara] When this card is Normal Summoned, Special Summon one Frozen Heart monster with 1500 or less ATK from you hand. [/spoiler] [spoiler Slena] When this card is Normal Summoned or Special Summoned to the field, Target Two Frozen Heart with monsters 1500 or less Def in your grave and Special summon them to the field. [/spoiler] [/spoiler] [Spoilers Xyz] [spoiler Number 26] [/spoiler] [spoiler Telsa] [/spoiler] [spoiler='Frozen Heart Killx'][/spoiler] [/spoiler] [spoiler='Syncro'] [spoiler='Frozen Heart Tira'][/spoiler] [/spoiler] [spoiler Spells] [spoiler Frozen Cavern] [/spoiler] [spoiler Frozen Wealth] [/spoiler] [spoiler Frozen Stand] [/spoiler] [spoiler frozen Force] [/spoiler] [spoiler Frozen Blade] [/spoiler] [/spoiler] [spoiler Trap] [spoiler Frozen Stance] [/spoiler] [spoiler Frozen Corination] [/spoiler] [/spoiler] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Amanea Posted July 11, 2013 Report Share Posted July 11, 2013 Hello! This is a cool archetype, and you need to type in the lore (effects) of each card in the archetype for ease of reading (rules ;-; ). Now! Let's review.... Just so that you don't feel bad, I'll tell you ahead of time that I'm only going to point out the things that are awry with the effects, so don't think that it's as horrible as I make it sound to be! xo Just some critique which will hopefully be constructive. Firstly, "Lynx" may have a typo.... Did you mean to say that she shuffles a "Frozen Heart" monster from the Graveyard back into the Deck? That would make sense. "Nyx" also has a typo in her name, I think, but aside from that, she is quite broken. You should limit the monsters which can be Special Summoned by her effect to Level 4 or lower monsters. "Frozen Cavern" might not have a complete effect written. You need to list the stats of the Token which it Summons (example: DARK/Fiend-Type/Level 2/ATK 200/ DEF 200). Then you need to add a multiplier to the number of Frozen Counters from which the Tokens will benefit; x300 to x400 is ideal in this case. The same goes for "Stand". It should end in: "Add "Frozen Heart" cards from your Deck to your hand equal to the number of Frozen Counters removed. That would provide a relationship between the number of cards added and the number of Counters removed. Along the lines of which: this is severely overpowered. There needs to be a tremendous condition or cost tagged onto such a powerful searching effect, lest we end up as Spellbooks. I would add to "Stand" as a cost: "You cannot Summon monsters or conduct your Battle Phase the turn you activate this effect." I feel like "Shiara" and "Slena" need a little bit more company. You have tons of monsters that plus off being Summoned by one of these two; they just can't handle all of the demands themselves. A third card with an effect similar to the aforementioned would serve well to round out this deck. "Slena", however, is extremely broken without a limitation clause similar to Shiara's. Add the " ... with 1500 ATK or less ... " to both of them. Finally, Fero's burn damage seems quite tangential to the current of the deck. Instead, I would replace that with a more meaningful effect for a monster of his caliber: "When this card is Summoned: You can remove Frozen Counters from your side of the field; destroy an equal number of cards on the field. You cannot conduct your Battle Phase the turn you activate this effect." That's just my suggestion! I really do enjoy a combination of FIRE and WATER-Attribute monsters that work in a very interconnected fashion. I also love how you introduced two "central" pieces of your puzzle - "Shiara" and "Slena" - as the trigger for all of your other monsters (though I do wish that there was a third one of them). Nice job with this, and I'll be watching as it progresses! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kaldar Posted July 11, 2013 Report Share Posted July 11, 2013 OCG needs work, you should type out the cards effects for us to read through them easier and quicker, alot of typos (nothing you can't fix), and you may want to tone down certain effects (I learned that just recently lol). Good luck. Oh and the pictures were very nice :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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