Brutus Miner

[Big Lez]

FLIP: Target 1 Xyz Monster your opponent controls; detach Xyz Material from that monster equal to the number of Special Summoned monsters your opponent controls, except that target.

 

I dont know if the effects will activate now, but im pretty sure they will and its actually wanted that way - if not, im also good with that ;)

 

If you like it you might also wanna check out http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/304525-brutus-grimbro/

[Zazubat]

It's interesting. I do however feel like it isn't good enough. While detaching is nice, they probably will only have 1 left on it anyway at that point. If it also decreased its ATK by 500 for each, then both would still guy maybe be able to survive, but also make the Xyz Monster completely useless. It could work pretty well if done right.

 

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FLIP: Target 1 Xyz [acronym='"monster" is only lowercased when you say just monster, if it's a specific monster type, you say "Monster"' ]Monster [/acronym]your opponent controls; detach Xyz Material from that monster equal to the number of Special Summoned monsters [acronym='saying "he/she" got outdated a long time ago, either say "your opponent controls" or "they control"']your opponent[/acronym] controls, [acronym='Keep stuff out of paratheses as much as possible, it's only really used for one thing, that being Inherrent Summons.']except that target.[/acronym]

[Big Lez]

Thanks a lot. Its been a long time since i was active in card making, so im kinda rusted i guess - and yeah, my OCG isnt really good anymore ^^

 

I was thinking about a "decrease ATK" effect, but since this is just a lv 3, 1900 DEF card i wanted to keep it as simple as possible, and i might add some sort of support, since im thinkin about a brutus archetype  :)