Marvin Likes Normal Summoning

[Big Lez]

When Normal Summoned: You can return it to your hand to target 1 Special Summoned monster your opponent controls; return it to the Deck. During the turn this card was Normal Summoned and returned to your hand: You can discard this card; Normal Summon 1 extra monster, except "Marvin El Brutus". (You can only gain this effect once per turn.)

[Zazubat]

Effect & Use: It's a free compulse basically. It wastes your Normal Summon, but it allows you to preform another Normal Summon. While you are going to waste your Normal Summon and you must discard, a free Compulse is still very powerful. It probably isn't any better than a Compulse, since it only gets Special Summoned monsters, but I still don't really like the design, since unless your opponnet has a Solemn or something like that, you cannot stop it's return effect, since it will not be on the field anymore.

Design: I cannot say I'm a fan. It gets only Special Summoned monsters, but that it still powerful. A slower more balanced card for this would be Evilswarm Azzathoth, which requires a Set, and is mandatory as well, so it might hit your own. The last part doesn't have the normal extra Normal Summon clause, so you could use more of this guy to preform extra Normal Summons, which I really don't like.

Flavor & Image: I find it kind of odd  you chose to put this in Realistic as the image is more pop culture. I got no idea what any of it has to do with Marvin the Martian, or why it's El Brutus (I am not 100 % what that means, but Google Translate tell me it means dull or awkward) so that really doesn't make any sense either.

Overall: I don't totaly hate it, had it been able to get any monster on the field, it would have been powerful, had it been able to get other cards than just Special Summoned monsters, would it had been powerful. I still don't dig the design, but it probably won't be played over Compulse either. It's hard for me to say what I think of it, as it isn't very playable, but not really good design either.

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When Normal Summoned: You can return it to your hand to target 1 Special Summoned monster your opponent controls; return it to[acronym='the owner's deck is old, don't use it, instead say "the" when talking about a card that might be able to return to the Deck that both players might be able to control.'] the Deck[/acronym]. During the turn this card was Normal Summoned and returned to your hand: You can discard this card; Normal Summon [acronym='Either use Kerykeion or Pahunder's text']1 monster. [/acronym]

My Version

When Normal Summoned: You can return it to your hand to target 1 Special Summoned monster your opponent controls; return it to the. During the turn this card was Normal Summoned and returned to your hand: You can discard this card; Normal Summon 1 monster, except "Marvin El Brutus". (You can only gain this effect once per turn.)

[Amanea]

BALANCE

The first effect struck me as very well-balanced, a mildly conditional effect which is neutral for the user and potentially devastating for the opponent, depending on how much they rely on Special Summoning. Of course, the user does relinquish their Normal Summon. Wait! Then I read the second effect. Oh, dear. That has to go. It pushes him over the edge by making him basically the evil child of Compulsory, except he throws them back into the Deck in exchange for a bit of contingency. It's too free and can be abused greatly as it stands.

 

DESIGN

It just feels a little generic. DARK Warrior with a free, powerful effect. Looking toward Grand Mole, he simply returns monsters to the hand (and to be honest, any truly effective target of his effect would likely have been Special Summoned) while wasting a Normal Summon entirely, and look at how annoying he is. So annoying that he was limited. This guy has built-in compensation for the Normal Summon that should have been a cost, and he shuffles his victims into the Deck. I'm just not an advocate for free bouncing. If I do recall, you were making a series of "Brutus" monsters, although I'm not really sure. I do like the expression on Marvin's face, very judgmental and cynical, but at the same time conniving, which is really reflected in the btch-gtfo-wit-ur-ssing effect. 

 

UTILITY

As it is, he can be packed into nearly any Side Deck, especially in those which use an abundance of monsters to sustain the consistency of his recovery effect. Chaos Dragons, if any still exist, may side him over Compulsory seeing that most of their hands are entirely (or almost entirely) monsters. Top tier decks really have no reason to run him, as he isn't exactly synergistic with Dragons or Spellcasters particularly. Evilswarms might just see him in the Side Deck because he can begin potential chains of Normal/Special Summoning after trashing an opposing Zenmaines, Big Eye, Dracossack, Stardust, Scrap, Utopia, Maestroke, Gachi, BLS, DAD... well, you get the idea.

 

FIXES

I would begin by nullifying the last effect. I really don't like that auto-recovery. It's like, "Here's a powerful effect that bypasses many popular destruction-prevention effects, oh, and it hits all the most powerful monsters in the game, oh, and it takes up a Normal Summon, OH, I LIED IT DOESN'T." Here's my rendition: "When Normal Summoned: You can return it to your hand to target 1 Special Summoned monster your opponent controls; return it to the Deck. During the turn this card was Normal Summoned and returned to your hand this way: You can discard this card; Normal Summon 1 monster. (You can only gain this effect once per turn.) If you Normal Summon a monster this way, return all Special Summoned monsters you control to the Deck." As far as OCG, I think Zuzu pointed out everything.

[Big Lez]

Has nothing to to with Marvin the Martian - i just liked the pic

The Brutus part is not supposed to make any sense. Its just a Name for someone who's brutal

 

The only once per turn part makes perfect sense

 

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