Blue Nitro's "i'm bored so lets make a random single" part [2/50]

[hexcalibrate]

Once per turn, you can either: Target 1 face-up Xyz Monster you control; equip this card to that target, OR: Unequip this card and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains the following effect:
● Once per turn: You can reveal the top card of your opponents Deck; If that card is a monster, you can attach it to this card as Xyz Material, if not add it to your opponents hand.
(A monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, destroy this card instead.)

[Zazubat]

Effect & Use: I wouldn't really use this. It is very situtional, its effect isn't really worth it, not only is the attach kind of meh, but the chance of giving your opponent a card is just not worth it. As a Union, it has some very few Union support cards, but that's really it, and as a Level 4 Machine, it can be added to the hand by Gear Giant.

Design: Well, it is balanced. I can say that without lying. Since Unions are kind of meh, it isn't all that good for them, but at the same time, it does gain the support from them as well, so that is a plus. But, that said, it isn't really worth it, even if it does steal your opponent's cards. It can be used for cards that need to keep materials on them, such as Tiras and Acid Golem, but it doesn't make it unbalanced that it can.

Flavor/Image & Originality: The image is just a flipped palette swap, but Konami has done this a few times, but not often. I would have wished for something more original. Maybe this could have been a Machina support card instead, that would help it a bit more. The effect is original though, I havn't seen such an effect before, but it isn't really that useful at all, which is the sad thing.

Overall: It could have been a lot better I feel. It's very lucky based, isn't that useable, can easily get blown up. It needed more to it for it to be good and worth it. 3/10

OCG fix: Hover your cursor over the word(s) with the dotted lines to read my reasons for the fixes. Make sure to hover over more than one one word, as it might put the things I have to say together with the dotted lines (or view it with BBcode turned off, just copy and paste it and click the switch in the control pannel). I do not repeat if you have made the flaw more than once, instead will it be bold (if any). Anything in italic is simple typos (if any). Anything in red means that it is something that is missing and should be there, as well as dotted lines to explain my reasoning/ask why you may have forgotten (if any). Also, if you have the time, check out my OCG Thread.

 

Once per turn, you can either: Target 1 face-up Xyz Monster you control; equip this card to that target, OR: Unequip this card and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. [acronym='This is a common mistake, something I see 9/10 times when a card has a bullet. Things in bullets only apply to when that effect is applied or activated, meaning anything like that actually applies to the Xyz Monster. At this point, it isn't a big deal, since that condition is always the case, no matter what, but in some cases, you don't want that, so put it before the bullet.'](A monster can only be equipped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, destroy this card instead.) [/acronym]While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains the following [acronym='Unless your effect activates when you do something (such as When this card is destroyed: You can activate 1 of the following effect:" you want to have a period instead of a colon.']effect.[/acronym]
● Once per turn: You can reveal the top card of your opponents Deck; [acronym='words after the semi-colon are not capitalized, unless it is normally (such as Special Summon or Xyz Monster)']if[/acronym] that card is a monster, you can attach it to this card as Xyz Material, if not add it to your opponent's hand.

[Therrion]

Well, the balance/playability and flavour/originality has been hit on the nail by Zazu, so I'll just add my last segment:

 

Suggestions/Additional Comments

To keep it in the same realm of effect instead of making an entire gear shift towards a new, more competitive effect: Perhaps you could make it equip from the hand (much like ZWs can) and instead of adding the card to your opponent's hand, you can place it at the bottom of the Deck instead.  If you don't want to return it to the bottom, or don't feel like adding too much wording to it, just put it back on top if it isn't a monster.

 

You can target 1 face-up Xyz Monster you control; equip this card from your hand or side of the field to that target OR: Unequip this card and Special Summon it in face-up Attack Position. (A monster can only be equiped with 1 Union Monster at a time. If the equipped monster would be destroyed, destroy this card instead.) While equipped by this effect, the equipped monster gains the following effect.
● Once per turn: You can reveal the top card of your opponents Deck; if that card is a monster, you can attach it to this card as Xyz Material, if not, place that card on the bottom of their Deck.

 

Note that my OCG may not be perfect, as I copy pasted the first from ZWs and since a ; comes before a : on a Union, I'm not really sure what to do with it so I kept as is.