Musical Mercenary Djinn Xyz (Hatsune Miku art)

[spoderman]

Tell me what you think. I accept all forms of criticism, and will edit my card if I agree with your comments. Remember, I'm no Industrial illusions maker XD Enjoy

Musical Mercenary Djinn
Fiend-DARK-Rank 4 Xyz/Effect
2 Level 4 monsters
ATK 1900 DEF 700
2 Level 4 DARK monsters
Once per turn, if a "Djinn" monster is Special Summoned, you can target one card on the field and return it to the owner's hand. You can detach 2 Xyz Materials from this card: target 1 face-up monster you control and 1 card your opponent controls: destroy them.

[goonie]

I'm not sure if people even use Djinn's other than Maestroke, but doesn't DDW outclass this? 
Less summoning restriction, and can destroy anything.

[spoderman]

Diamond Dire Wolf requires a specific type of monster to destroy, and can only destroy. Not to mention the Once Per Turn. I admit the cost is a bit heavy, but I don't like making really powerful cards :( too many of those nowadays.

[goonie]

Diamond Dire Wolf requires a specific type of monster to destroy, and can only destroy. Not to mention the Once Per Turn. I admit the cost is a bit heavy, but I don't like making really powerful cards :( too many of those nowadays.

 

I guess in the case that some Djinn's are actually being used, people would go into this, but I was saying DDW was better than this because I was comparing it to the second effect, where Mercenary has to suicide to pop a face-up monster. DDW can target itself, but it's also an out to any Spell/Traps.

[goddamnit names are a pain]

Musical Mercenary Djinn

Fiend-DARK-Rank 4 Xyz/Effect

2 Level 4 DARK monsters

ATK 1900 DEF 700

Once per turn, if a "Djinn" monster is Special Summoned, you can target one card on the field and return it to the owner's hand. You can detach 2 Xyz Materials from this card: destroy this card and 1 face-up monster your opponent controls.

 

Just a minor change.

The only issue is that you'd need Maestroke first, then this, then another Djinn, which kind of seems like a bit much. I wouldn't detach 2 and commit suicide, its not needed. One to pop one card on each side of the field, Scrap Dragon Style? Something similar, so not a huge down side. Thats like summoning a monster that just destroys one other monster and leaves. Maestroke combos well with this though.

[spoderman]

Thanks for the criticism both of you. I'll apply changes as soon as I can.

[spoderman]

Edited. I kept the detach 2 and own monster target, since a Rescue Rabbit -> Double Scrap Dragon eff-> Return to Hands = broken

 

[spoderman]

bump

[Ludisir]

I like it, but I think if you made its detach effect a "once per turn, detach 1" it wouldn't be too overpowered, being that at 1900 attack it can't defend itself from many attacks.