Time Traveling Pirates [Timestream Archetype] Updated

[ExtremeG]

I have been working on this archetype for a while because I wanted to get the terms and art and effects and concepts all to match up. And what was the end result you ask? TIME TRAVELING PIRATES! Timestream is an archetype inspired by Macholches, Gravekeepers, and Steampunk. The names of the monsters are very bad puns combining a measurement of time with a position on a pirate ship. They are DARK psychic types with 0 DEF. Their effects revolve around Deck control by burying themselves and opponent's monsters. Burying? WHAT'S THAT?

Bury - To place a card at the bottom of the Deck.

The centerpiece of this Deck is the Field Spell. Subspace Time Vortex. While you control it and a Timestream monster, neither player can add or remove cards from the Deck unless the cards are drawn or buried. This gives the archetype a good anti-meta feel to it that is kinda like the Deck equivalent of Necrovalley.

So what are your thoughts? OP? UP? Comments? Suggestions? I always love to hear a good pun if you have a suggestion for a new crew member/time measurement :D
 
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[kirur]

First off let me start by saying I loved this idea of new burying concept I think its original and very different from everything I've ever seen in Yugioh so congrats on that! Now my evaluation on these cards will be entirely based on my opinion so bear with me. The score will include everything, from image, to name, the effect, the synergy with the rest of the deck, the archtype bonus and of course if it's OP or balanced (the more the unbalanced the card is the worse my score will be!).


On to the reviews:

Subspace Time Vortex: Since you already mentioned this card is a Field Spell card I know it but you should put the symbol for Field Spell cause you forgot! This card's effect feels very balanced since it can only be active while you control a Timestream monster and I like that a lot because it makes it fair and random decks won't just abuse it's effect (I am correct about this... right?). I also think the name/image fit in perfectly with one another and that even looks like a massive ship coming out of a Time Vortex and thats just freaking awesome! - 9/10

Timestream Daector: Woah this card can be Special Summoned using Emergency Teleport and I already think that's freaking powerfull considering he can deny 3 cards from the opponent's graveyard right off the bat, this just sounds way too good to be true considering a Trap card like The Transmigration Prophecy is Limited to 1 and he is also a much better/improved version of Kycoo the Ghost Destroyer (and this guy is used in a lot of sidedecks) ... so yeah this guy certainly feels unbalanced, but wait there's more he can become a 1900 beater while doing this effect AND if he gets buried (and he probably will) he'll give you a free +1! Jezuz... yeah this card is unfortunately Very Unbalanced. (Other than that though he is freaking awesome and I suggest you balance him out because he deserves it!) - 2/10

Timestream Miningineer: Also another card abused by Emergency Teleport, but this guy is better having on hand and the reason is unfortunately way too powerfull to even consider. You see with this badass on your hand you can bury your monster and the opponent's and Special Summon this guy while doing that! Wait thats not all, when he does he destroys 1 spell/trap card, did I say destroy? Send to Graveyard! hahaha soo freaking good it's just unreasonable! First off his effect to getting Special Summoned while getting rid of an opponent's monster and your own is not a cost.. its a freaking advantage +4, let me explain how: +1= for getting rid of opponents monster, +2= burying a potential Timestream monster you have and getting his effect, +3= Special summoning this guy, and +4= sending 1 spell/trap card the opponent has to the graveyard. So yes please balance this guy out because he is beyond ridiculous! (I do love his name/image though!) - 2/10

Timestream Quarter Monthster: This guy doesn't look as cool as the other two I reviewed but his effect is at least more balanced than them and trust me... thats a good thing! Now don't get me wrong his effect is still off the hook, see this guy can get Special Summoned, remove a card from the field and he's a 1800 beater... it looks unbalanced doesn't it? It is but considering his friends are broken this one is not.. I would still suggest making him more reasonable and perhaps lowering his ATK to 1700? He also should target before burying it and his text should say "destroys an opponent's monster by battle" but I think thats an OCG thing? I don't even know. I'm also not fond of his image, he doesn't really fit in with his own background and he doesn't look as mystifying as his friends do. - 4/10

Timestream Secunner: It looks like a female pirate who got lost quite literally in time since her choice of clothes/weapon is old even for us, not that it's a bad thing (I don't like it though). I think there's a typo in her text - "Time Traveler's Library" ? If not then I havent seen all the cards yet or are you still going to create it? Either way with that other specific card on the field this card is quite deadly and it will make the opponent delay almost any of his plays because of that, also.. this is the first balanced monster in this archtype and i say hallelujah! - 7/10

Timestream Culinour: I dig him but he looks nothing like a Psychic-type... I know I know, its part of the Archtype but I'm just saying.. that's a Machine-type yo! His effect is pretty unique and perhaps a little too strong but he does have to get destroyed by battle and I don't really attack face-downs but you could force it by attacking the opponent's monster which is not bad, you get to draw a card and Summon a monster if you do.. Sounds really powerfull but I feel it's balanced but perhaps his effect can only be used once per turn? It just sounds unfair to draw 3 cards and special summon 3 monsters doesn't it? - 5/10

Timestream Capteon: 1st you can summon 3 of this guy from your hand to a potential Rank 8 (2 or 3 materials) and that alone might be way too good but it's not since most players now at days use a lot of hand monster effects like Effect Veiler and Maxx "C" but it's still a very easy OTK potentail card, and were talking about his Special Summon effect alone cause his other effect to return cards to hand is hellofacrazy ride to even consider, dude this is unbalanced and stupid. Did you forget about Brionac the BANNED? Yeah I suggest fixing his effect not to be so easy to abuse and perhaps relying on your own graveyard to summon him cause that would just make more sense imo. Also he looks like he's stuck at the same timezone Secunner is and I don't like that. - 4/10

Timestream Navidecader: Woah this gal's effect is quite impressive and original it is too bad she looks nothing like the Archtype. Her effect to gain even more materials is very nice since she can protect herself with them but her main effect to negate the opponent's cards and effect is fucking insane to say the least. I mean not only does she negate any face-down effect, trap card, spell card and monster from hand effects but she also does it wasting only 1 Material, bro... thats way too unbalanced and broken.. she should use at LEAST 2 materials and it should be less of an OP protection effect. Now I'm not saying she is completely broken.. I'm saying she would make people cry.. LOL - 3/10



In general I didn't really enjoy the monster's effects since most of them were very unbalanced and had too many grammar mistakes but I did enjoy the deck's theme/archtype and there's still so much potential to be analyzed and hopefully balanced.. although some card images don't really match one another or Timestream's theme but it also doesn't stray that much far from it. Of course this is all my opinion!

Overall score - 5/10

[ExtremeG]

Thank you sooo much for the input!!! I'll get right yo work on these suggestions!

 

Subspace Time Vortex: Thank you! Fixing error!

Timestream Daector: Good point! I'll change it's effect to a Normal Summon ignition and only go up to 1600. How's that?

Timestream Miningineer: I wanted to do something that would both protect my monster and activate it's affect when buried, but I see your point. Second effect gone and remains in attack position?

Timestream Quarter Monthster: IDK, I like the style. It's a little more swash-buckling, which is what I was originally going for. Taking out 1st effect?

Timestream Secunner: You try and find an image of a female pirate fully dressed! :T The internet is weird. Fixing error!

Timestream Culinour: The idea was to create a "Special Summon 1 "X" monster from the Deck" without actually taking it out of the Deck, if that makes sense. But yeah, I made it so it can't add itself. Good call :D

Timestream Capteon: Looking at it now, it is pretty broken. I just wanted to create a super trump, but you're right, too much. I gave the effect a Life Points cost, only targets opponent's cards, and needs both player's Graveyards to be empty. 

Timestream Navidecader: Well, I was inspired by that one Gem Knight thing that could block effects, but I guess it's just to much here. I'll just give her a Xing Zhen Hu Replica effect

[kirur]

Thank you sooo much for the input!!! I'll get right yo work on these suggestions!

 

Subspace Time Vortex: Thank you! Fixing error!

Timestream Daector: Good point! I'll change it's effect to a Normal Summon ignition and only go up to 1600. How's that?

Timestream Miningineer: I wanted to do something that would both protect my monster and activate it's affect when buried, but I see your point. Second effect gone and remains in attack position?

Timestream Quarter Monthster: IDK, I like the style. It's a little more swash-buckling, which is what I was originally going for. Taking out 1st effect?

Timestream Secunner: You try and find an image of a female pirate fully dressed! :T The internet is weird. Fixing error!

Timestream Culinour: The idea was to create a "Special Summon 1 "X" monster from the Deck" without actually taking it out of the Deck, if that makes sense. But yeah, I made it so it can't add itself. Good call :D

Timestream Capteon: Looking at it now, it is pretty broken. I just wanted to create a super trump, but you're right, too much. I gave the effect a Life Points cost, only targets opponent's cards, and needs both player's Graveyards to be empty. 

Timestream Navidecader: Well, I was inspired by that one Gem Knight thing that could block effects, but I guess it's just to much here. I'll just give her a Xing Zhen Hu Replica effect

I'm glad to see you updated/balanced them already, I gotta admit I really like this burying idea and I would definitely play this deck if it was real!  :D 

Now let me review this update because from what I've seen some of these cards actualy got too weak and I still see a lot of grammar problems but let's get to it:

Subspace Time Vortex: He looks perfect and I'm glad he works the way I initially thought, it is very powerfull but balanced at the same time and I love that, I do hope this Archtype gets a bit more support but not too much or else it just becomes lame.. at least around 15 to 20 cards would be fantastic! - 9/10

Timestream Daector: I like him and now if people Emergency Teleport him it won't really matter, he is still very powerfull but very balanced since his effect works only once per turn and only when Normal Summoned, yes yes this looks/feels fantastic! This guy is my favorite Timestream monster for sure! - 9/10

Timestream Miningineer: I see you want to maintain his powerfull effect to trigger in the hand and thats fine but I think it needs some fixing like "During the Battle Phase, when an opponent's monster declares an attack on face-up Timestream monster you control, reveal this card and target both your monster and the opponent's; bury them, and if you do Special Summon this card from your hand in face-up Attack Position." If it's not a face-up timestream monster this effect might be too powerfull, it's still an advantage +3 even if face-up but it does feel balanced now and perhaps this effect can only be used once per turn? Anyway this card/effect is freaking awesome and I love his image/name! - 8/10

Timestream Quarter Monthster: He looks balanced now, or does he? Nope he looks weak now! Think about it, now he can only be Special Summoned during the End Phase, why is that even good? I can see he would benefit greatly from Miningineer but other than that this guy is just a simple 1800 beater, but perhaps this isn't bad since his other 2 friends are Level 3 and the Timestream Xyz does require Level 4.... I don't know I would be glad to use him if i had a Miningineer on hand but if I didn't I wouldn't really know if I was even going to summon him... - 7/10

Timestream Secunner: Now I get it and her effect is freaking awesome working together with the Field Spell? Hell yeah thats control/shut down opponent's game in a second! I would love to summon this with a Miningineer in hand and just see what my opponent is going to do, hahaha! I also now appreciate her image much more now.. LOL - 8/10

Timestream Culinour: I like it a lot it now feels balanced and it's still of hell of an effect, but maybe you should give even more freedom to whoever is using his effect, let me show you how: "Excavate up to 3 cards from the bottom of the Deck, you can place up to 2 "Timestream" monsters at the top of the Deck in any order, if you do; draw 1 card and you can Special Summon 1 "Timestream" monster from your hand, except "Timestream Culinour"." now you can choose how many cards to excavate and how many you can put on top and it becomes a cost for you to actualy Special Summon so if you don't have any you can't Special Summon, that's what you're going for right? Cause that feels balanced/awesome! - 9/10

Timestream Capteon: Woah I know you wanted to balance but now it will be very hard to Summon him eh? I don't know I think you still need to think it over cause he just feels like a dead-draw, Yes he's still good on the first turn but other than that? What if you don't have your field spell on? Monsters going in graveyard are the most easiest thing to happen and this guy will just be stuck on the hand most of the game, I guarantee it! His effect to return to hand looks more powerfull than ever now, since you can just use it over and over again until you return everything the opponent has to his hand and abuse all the Timestream monsters who got buried, so yeah this guy feels like he needs more work, at least in my opinion anyway. - 5/10

Timestream Navidecader: Now she looks freaking horrible.. not only you are wasting 2 materials to stop temporarily 2 Set Spell/Traps but the opponent can just activate them in chain to this effect - thats freaking horrible. I just don't like the fact you are just copying other Xyz effects... you should put this gal on a Timezone and just think of what the focus of the deck is and how this Xyz monster benefit the deck, the combo, the burying and the control part as well, cause this deck feels like it's leading towards control but what really defines that is the Xyz monsters, so you should really put more effort into this one ~ please! - 1/10


In general I really enjoyed the new update/balanced cards and I love where this is going, I do hope you still fix the ones I mentioned and you make more Timestream cards!!! I can't wait to see! Thanks for this great idea and I hope my review is helping you somehow!

New Overall Score - 7/10

[ExtremeG]

"At least around 15 to 20 cards would be fantastic!" Ask you you shall receive. :D

Timestream Quarter Monthster: Gave him a Fire King-esk effect. Nothing too powerful, but still helpful in many situations.


Timestream Capteon: Fixed :D

Timestream Navidecader: Double fixed! Now with more control power ^O^

Now with a few members of the space police (fuck da police!) and one of many to come space critters that inhabit the Time Vortex! Enjoy!

[ExtremeG]

New card added and bump :)

[JellyNinja]

Nice burying concept!

[ExtremeG]

New Dwellers added :D

[Danimally]

I like your idea about Space Pirates, reminds me of Treasure Planet x3

 

But i have to say that this Timestream Capteon is a little bit overpowered (and too long to read, too).

U can change that 5 card check for 4 cards check.

Maybe u can change "Must be Special Summoned...and cannot be special summoned..." part for "This card can only be summoned by Special Summon from your hand by removing 2 face-up "Time-Stream" monsters you control". It's the same effect i think, but compressed. And it have some error, like "if" instead "of" or "Eon" instead "capteon".

 

In general, i like your archetype style, but i would like to test it.