Beerus Posted June 6, 2014 Report Share Posted June 6, 2014 Pay 1500 Life Points to target 1 face-up Xyz, Synchro or Fusion Monster your opponent controls; take control of that target and equip it with this card. It cannot attack your opponent directly. When that monster inflicts battle damage to your opponent, your opponent draws 1 card. When equipped monster is destroyed destroy this card, when this card is destroyed destroy the equpped monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Enma Ai Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Quick card grammar fix; Pay 2000 life points: Target 1 face-up Xyz, Synchro or Fusion monster your opponent controls; take control of that target. When that monster you control inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent: Your opponent draws 1 card. At first I misread and thought YOU draw every time it inflicts damage. But as it is, it seems fine. It is permanent control, so I would probably attach another drawback onto the card. maybe something like "That monster you control cannot attack your opponent directly" or "That monster can not be used as Xyz, Synchro or Fusion material." Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beerus Posted June 7, 2014 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Quick card grammar fix; Pay 2000 life points: Target 1 face-up Xyz, Synchro or Fusion monster your opponent controls; take control of that target. When that monster you control inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent: Your opponent draws 1 card. At first I misread and thought YOU draw every time it inflicts damage. But as it is, it seems fine. It is permanent control, so I would probably attach another drawback onto the card. maybe something like "That monster you control cannot attack your opponent directly" or "That monster can not be used as Xyz, Synchro or Fusion material. Thanks for the feedback and OCG fix. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Excalibur the Divine Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 ]Pay 2000 life points: Target 1 face-up Xyz, Synchro or Fusion monster your opponent controls; take control of that target. That monster you control cannot attack your opponent directly. When that monster you control inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent: Your opponent draws 1 card. OCG errors. The effect in correct OCG format is: Pay 2000 life points to target 1 face-up Xyz, Synchro or Fusion monster your opponent controls: take control of that target. That monster you control cannot attack your opponent directly. When that monster you control inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent: Your opponent draws 1 card. Just fixed the first sentence by taking out the co. And adding the word "to" and I also changed the semicolon to a colon Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razzy Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Colons : indicate activation requirements semicolons ; indicate the actual effect of the card. Pay 2000 Life Points, to(then?) target 1 Monster your opponent controls that was Special Summoned from the Extra Deck; take control of that target. That monster cannot attack your opponent directly. When that monster inflicts Battle Damage to your opponent, your opponent draws 1 card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Overfrost! Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Pay 2000 Life Points to target 1 Monster your opponent controls that was Special Summoned from the Extra Deck; take control of that target. It cannot attack your opponent directly. When that monster inflicts battle damage to your opponent, your opponent draws 1 card. Some more fixes. About the card, 2000 lp cost is too much. Make it 1000, and do some more tweaks to its restrictions. Monarchs are something to note if you're going to tweak this card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beerus Posted June 7, 2014 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 If I made this card Continuous, would this card become OP? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razzy Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Actually coming to think of you could keep it "Fusion, Synchro, Xyz" monster instead of from "extra deck" that way in case they revived something from Graveyard you could still get. Not sure if that'll matter a whole lot though. make it an equip. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beerus Posted June 7, 2014 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 Actually coming to think of you could keep it "Fusion, Synchro, Xyz" monster instead of from "extra deck" that way in case they revived something from Graveyard you could still get. Not sure if that'll matter a whole lot though. make it an equip. OK, thanks I'll return it's effect to the old one. So you think it wouldn't be OP, if I made this card Continuous. That way you can take control of the opponent monsters each turn. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
razzy Posted June 7, 2014 Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 No I'm saying make it equip to the monster. So if they mst it or something they'd get their monster. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Beerus Posted June 7, 2014 Author Report Share Posted June 7, 2014 No I'm saying make it equip to the monster. So if they mst it or something they'd get their monster. OK. I made it as Equip Card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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FairGamer Posted June 8, 2014 Report Share Posted June 8, 2014 nice card, I really like the art too, and I totaly dig the name. its a game changer card. though I'd change one thing, if the equiped card is removed from fiels return control of the monster. I mean its an equip card so destroying monster doesnt feel right for me. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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