008: Horror Riders: Famine the Injustice (+ Countdown of the Condemmned)

[Dokutah]

a little side tracking from working on my "Blanclads" ( http://forum.yugiohcardmaker.net/topic/318761-007-blanclad-white-outburst/ ) since basically is the only archetype i post that actually get review.. (yes i only working up the archetype if you give me the precious CnC...) ok again i post 2 card but it necessary since they tied each other (sort like ritual monster and its spell...)

 

first card:

 

Cannot be Special Summoned or Set. This card can and must be Normal Summoned during either player turn by Tributing 3 "Condemned Token". This card Summon cannot be negated.During the End Phase of the turn this card is Normal Summoned or when it would be removed from Field: Return it to the hand. When your opponent would add or draw card(s) to his/her Hand or Deck by card effect except he/she draw during Draw Phase, negate the effect; Banish that card and all cards he/she would add to his/her Hand or Deck for the rest of the Duel, then halved the ATK of all other monsters

 

second card:

 

This card activation cannot be negate. you can only control 1 "Countdown of the Condemned". once per turn this card cannot be destroyed by card effect. for each of Monster card sent to Graveyard place 1 Soul Counter on this card. Soul Counter on this card cannot be removed except by this card effect. Once per turn you can remove any number of Soul Counter to Special Summon "Condemned Tokens"(Psychic-Type/DARK/LEVEL 4/ATK 560/DEF 560) in defense position for each.You cannot Summon or Set any monsters, except "Condemned Tokens",Normal monster(s), and/or "Horror Riders". you can only active "Countdown of the Condemned" once per Duel

 

CnC? (picture for the spell will be edited soon)

[Dokutah]

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[Dokutah]

effects updated...

 

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[Anarkist]

Dope cards man, I love the Horror Riders motif it really reminds me of the 4 Horsemen of Apocalypse from christian mythology (maybe just because u named him Famine, which I believe was one of the Horsemen).

Up front bro, Im by no means an advanced Yu-Gi-Oh! player (though I was decent in my young days lol) so I dont feel like I have a right to criticize ur cards or work but I can give my friendly opinions:)

 

I really like both these cards, I think u culd maybe make the effects more precise like:

 

Cannot be Special Summoned or Set. Can only be Normal Summoned, during either player's turn, by Tributing 3 "Condemned" Tokens. The Normal Summon of this card cannot be negated. During the End Phase of the turn this card is Normal Summoned, or when it would be removed from Field: Return it to the hand instead. When your opponent draws or adds cards to his/her Hand or Deck by a card effect, except during his/her Draw Phase, negate the effect and Banish that card, then halve the ATK of all other monsters on the field.

 

This card's activation cannot be negated. You can control only 1 "Countdown of the Condemned". Once per turn, this card cannot be destroyed by card effects. Each time a monster is sent to the Graveyard you can place 1 "Soul Counter" on this card. "Soul Counters" on this card cannot be removed except by this card's own effect. Once per turn you can remove any number of "Soul Counters" to Special Summon a number of "Condemned Tokens"(Psychic-Type/DARK/LEVEL 4/ATK 560/DEF 560) in defense position for each Counter removed. You cannot Summon or Set other monsters, except for "Condemned Tokens", Normal monsters, or "Horror Riders". "Countdown of the Condemned" can only be activated once per Duel.

 

I've never reviewed someone's cards before but I really hope this helped! I'll probably think of other stuff I thought was cool, or could maybe be tweaked slightly and edit this post later :)

[Dokutah]

that exact point i bring you here.. giving u chance to review cards (for first time...and you doing it quite right..good job).. and a long with it make you better maker (by review other card you may learn more of OCG/TCG... same thing when you learn from the real cards and a possible way to make more original effect)