Relinquished Colossus

[WolvenDoom]

 

Effect:

 

4 Level 1 monsters

If 'Relinquished' is not an Xyz material, banish this card.Once per turn you can discard up to 2 cards from your hand, for each card discarded attach a monster from your opponents side of the field to this card. If this card would be destroyed, detach an Xyz material instead. This cards Atk and Def is equal to the total Atk and Def of all attached Xyz materials. When This card attacks, Flip a coin if heads this card can attack your opponent directly. 

[Delibirb]

I find it pretty hilarious that the image is exactly the one used in my Relinquished Xyz monster - bar the red eye - seeing as I edited it from an image I found to be this way. And that you maed yours Number 0 as I did. =_= My card, the one I suspect this is trying to mimic, is in my signature. You can see the similarities there.

 

Ignoring that the card isn't very well designed. It would never be run, not even in Dustons, because 4 Level 1 monsters are either too unlikely or better spent on Numbers 13 and 31. If it were run, the effect is overpowered: gaining a combined ATK and DEF of all of its materials, and having the potential to completely bypass any destruction or targeting immunities of 2 monsters. That is absolutely massive and shouldn't exist.

[0DST]

I hate to sound like an ass, but...

I don't like this card. There are blatant OCG errors, and general grammatical errors too. I think the last bit of the effect pushes this card into the furthest realm of OP it could go, which is saying a lot. Here is what I would change the effect to (my OCG isn't the best, so expect mistakes);

 

"Relinquished + 2 Level 1 Monsters

If Relinquished is not attached to this card; Banish it at the end of your turn. This card's ATK and DEF is equal to the ATK and DEF of the XYZ material monster with the highest ATK and DEF. If this card were to be destroyed by battle: Detach one monster from this card; negate the destruction of this card. Once per turn: You may detach one XYZ material monster from this card; Attach one monster whose level is 3 or less higher than the detached monster from your Opponent's side of the field."

 

I have neither the knowledge, nor the skill, to write that last sentence properly. But the general idea is there.

 

Also, and this is really just a personal preference, but I don't like the picture used. I just don't think the Eldrich-Michael-Bay-Shockwave looks that good. But, that is probably just me.

[Im the prince of the ring!]

I have to agree with kanoduston here. THe effect to take the monster and gains its stats is totally OP. you try to justify it by having relinquished mandatory for the monster, but even then, the card isn't worth using because relinquished isn't that useful in today's metagame. In fact, i'd rather run relinquished over this because of how it equips and deal the same battle damage to your opponent. the nail that hits the coffin is the fact that it can attack directly. With that, that could be a potential OTK with this card. for a rank 1, that's horrendously bad design. Change the effect, that's the only thing you can do. Otherwise, you may as well put this into joke cards instead.