Lettemis, Archangel of Death

[Forest Fire]

Lore:  

3 Level 12 DARK Monsters

You can also Xyz Summon this card using 3 DARK Xyz Monsters which have a total combined rank of 12. This card's Xyz Summon cannot be negated. When this card is Xyz Summoned: Its original ATK and DEF becomes  equal to the total respective ATKs and DEFs of the monsters used to Xyz Summon this card. This card's maximum number of attacks per turn equals the number of Xyz Materials attached to it. If this card would destroy a face-down monster; Inflict piercing battle damage to your opponent, and negate any Flip Effects that would activate in response to that card's destruction. You cannot conduct your next Battle Phase if this card dealt your opponent piercing battle damage this turn. Once per turn, you may detach 1 Xyz Material from this card, if you do; Banish any monsters in play whose ATK or DEF is lower than this cards. 

 

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Lore: 3 Level 12 DARK Monsters
This card's original ATK and DEF become equal to the total respective ATKs and DEFs of the monsters used to Xyz Summon this card. This card can attack as many times as the number of Xyz Materials it has attached to it. If this card would destroy a face-down monster; Inflict piercing battle damage to your opponent, and negate any Flip Effects that would activate in response to that card's destruction or effects that would negate that battle damage. You cannot conduct your next Battle Phase if you activated this effect.  Once per turn, you may detach 1 Xyz Material from this card, if you do; Banish any monsters in play whose ATK or DEF is lower than that cards. 
 
[spoiler Some notes] This guy is uber hard to summon, so his power is justified

[spoiler Proof] There are 5 monsters you can use to summon him in total:
Armityle the Chaos Phantom
Five-Headed Dragon
Malefic Truth Dragon
Red Nova Dragon
Yubel-The Ultimate Nightmare
All of which are hard enough to summon, but to get Lettemis out you need to get 3 of them out.
[spoiler A little rant] When I was looking for images for Lettemis, I looked up "God of death". You know what came up as a related search "Anubis God of Death". Anubis is not a god of death. Period. Here are his roles: 

-Protector of tombs  

-Embalmer

-Weigher of the heart

-Guide of souls

Where in there is Bringer of Death or anything like that? 

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[Y0SH1_M4S73R]

 
This guy is uber hard to summon, so his power is justified

[url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Galaxy_Queen%27s_Light]Galaxy Queen's Light[/url] says hello. Won't necessarily make this that much easier to summon, but it's a thing. Anyway, some OCG fixers. (Old text stricken through, new text in bold, moved text italicized, text I can't find a way to correct underlined and stricken through)

 

3 Level 12 DARK Monsters
This card's When this card is Xyz Summoned: Its original ATK and DEF becomes equal to the total respective the combined original ATKs and DEFs of the all monsters used to Xyz Summon this card attached to it as Xyz Material. This card's maximum number of attacks per turn equals can attack as many times as the number of Xyz Materials it has attached to it. If this card would destroy a If this card battles a face-down Defense Position monster, Inflict piercing battle damage to your opponent.  Negate the effects of Flip Effects Monsters that would activate in response to that card's destruction destroyed by battle with this card. or effects that would negate that battle damage. You cannot conduct your next Battle Phase if you activated this effect. Once per turn: You may can detach 1 Xyz Material from this card, if you do; Banish any all face-up monsters in play on the field whose ATK or DEF is lower than that cards the ATK or DEF of the detached Xyz Material.

 

Some additional critique on the card's effects:

 

1) Negating battle damage negation is not possible using current card terminology. To do this, we would have to add "ignoring any effects that prevent that card's controller from taking Battle Damage from this battle", or a similar clause, which to my awareness, doesn't exist yet.

 

2) Forcing you to skip your BP only works if the effect is activated. Inflicting piercing damage is not an activated effect. To get the desired effect, you would have to use the "If this card battles a face-down Defense position monster" trigger twice: once for the piercing damage, again for the BP skip. This is due to the fact that conditions, such as the BP skip, cannot be applied to continuous effects, such as the piercing damage. (at least not to my awareness. A better card reviewer may correct me.)

 

3) If the effect that banishes refers to the stats of the Xyz Material detached to activate the effect (as opposed to your card itself), you overlooked the possibility of Spell/Trap materials like [url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Overlay_Regen]Overlay Regen[/url]. It would be wise to add the following ruling clarification text: "(If the detached Xyz Material is a Spell/Trap card, its ATK and DEF are treated as 0.)" In addition, I changed it to banish only face-up monsters because face-down monsters are unaffected by effects that only work on monsters with specific stats.

 

Now, to discuss the actual power of the card itself. The easiest way to summon this behemoth basically makes it at least a 5k beatstick, but most kinds of removal work on it, putting all the effort of summoning the materials to waste. At least make its summon non-negatable, like [url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Star_Eater]Star Eater[/url]. The (possible) banish nuke is extremely devastating, assuming your opponent has no negation cards and isn't playing Ghostricks. Overall, this card is an infinitely less useful version of [url=http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Sophia]Sophia[/url], who herself isn't that useful due to her summoning condition.

[Forest Fire]

"all monsters attached to it as Xyz Material." no. just no. then once you detach an xyz material, he loses ATK and DEF points unlike the original. 

 

Galaxy Queen's Light says hello. Won't necessarily make this that much easier to summon, but it's a thing. Anyway, some OCG fixers. (Old text stricken through, new text in bold, moved text italicized, text I can't find a way to correct underlined and stricken through)

 

 The (possible) banish nuke is extremely devastating, assuming your opponent has no negation cards and isn't playing Ghostricks. Overall, this card is an infinitely less useful version of Sophia, who herself isn't that useful due to her summoning condition.

hmm. how about if i add this in: "You cannot use monsters whose levels have been changed as Xyz Materials to Xyz Summon this card"; this way a power increase would be balanced out?  

[Im the prince of the ring!]

"all monsters attached to it as Xyz Material." no. just no. then once you detach an xyz material, he loses ATK and DEF points unlike the original. 

 

hmm. how about if i add this in: "You cannot use monsters whose levels have been changed as Xyz Materials to Xyz Summon this card"; this way a power increase would be balanced out?  

 If you do that, this card would be even LESS useful. The effect is op as it is, but this card isn't worth using because there are very few level 12 DARK monsters out there. Even so, by the time you get those level 12 DARK monsters out, it isn't worth summoning in the first place.

[The15thWing]

I'd just like to point out that 2/5 Cards that can actually be used for this card have 0 ATK/DEF.

 

With this in mind, you should REALLY avoid this clause.

VVV

 

"all monsters attached to it as Xyz Material." no. just no. then once you detach an xyz material, he loses ATK and DEF points unlike the original. 

 

hmm. how about if i add this in: "You cannot use monsters whose levels have been changed as Xyz Materials to Xyz Summon this card"; this way a power increase would be balanced out?  

 

 

I think that, this card should probably be kept like it is, even with the aforementioned Galaxy Queen's Light; Let's be honest, even with that, you'd still be giving up something you probably wanna keep + 2 more DARK monsters. The only thing that I feel should be altered is the "Banish anything with lower ATK or DEF than the card detached" effect. This probably should lower the ATK and DEF of Lettemis, since it's rather powerful. Another idea might be to give it an effect such as:

 

"You can also Xyz Summon this card using 3 DARK Xyz Monsters which have a total combined rank of 12." Which would make this guy much more versatile. Make sure it doesn't take the Materials attached to those Monsters, if you add this effect, since that could be catastrophic.

[Forest Fire]

thanks you guys. edit to come. 

 

edited. 

[Forest Fire]

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[Forest Fire]

can we please make it so you can bump twice a day as long as the bumps are 12 hours apart? cause that would be lovely. 

[Forest Fire]

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