elamental hero's Posted March 25, 2008 Report Share Posted March 25, 2008 hello and here is my new fan fic and my first one to please enjoy by elamental hero's.please do not banned me and don't lock this thread. episode 1 dueling a robber.one day there was a boy called david and he loved to duel and qualfy for th 2008 championships.when th alarm went off david pressed the button to turn it off.David:i'm going to duel acadmey first and if i win the quarlfying tables i will be able to be in 2008@s chamionships.he quickley jumped out of bed and put his clouths on.He just forgot one thing and he picked it up his bag with al his yugioh stuff.David asked grandpa a few questions.David:grandpa did you win the 1966 championships.Grandpa:yes i won all of them until i retired at 2002.David:did you win a big cup.Grandpa:yes.He just forgot he only had one more question.David:grandpa was there loads of people.Grandpa:yes,there was a big massive croud and only 7 people could qualfy so that means 7 tables.David ran out of questions and started his journey to duel acadmey.On the way he herd a police car!!!!David:what's up.police:a robber has just stealed someone's deck.David ran up to the robber and threw a rock.The robber triped up and fell give that person's cards back said David.Robber:no,you will have't to duel for them.David:i'll start i draw and the i finish the duel by activating - 8000 life points from your oppnent.David life points:8000Robber's life points: 0Robber:argh!!!Robber:but you still can't have them back i'm giving it to knoa!!!Suddenley he just dissapeard.First of all david has got to go to duel acadmey and second were has the robber gone.When he thought about duel acadmey it was 10:00 only 1 hour till duel acadmey's finished and he went to duel acedmey.dr crowler:our next duel is David vs me. To Be Continuedwill David win against dr crowler and were has the robber gone find out tomororo. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lord monster Posted March 26, 2008 Report Share Posted March 26, 2008 can i join i like story's like this bro Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
elamental hero's Posted March 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 27, 2008 ok then Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yusei Fudou Posted March 27, 2008 Report Share Posted March 27, 2008 Bad grammar, broken cards, no plot.. This fails. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted March 27, 2008 Report Share Posted March 27, 2008 Bad Grammar, Some of the cards suck like the take 8000 points from your opponent card.The plot is not original , once again some new kid duels Crowler. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
elamental hero's Posted March 29, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 29, 2008 what is a bad grammer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Luna Diviner Posted March 29, 2008 Report Share Posted March 29, 2008 That was bad grammar.Grammar does not have an E in it.You have too many mispellings and you haven't worded it correctly. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
elamental hero's Posted March 29, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 29, 2008 ok i will try my best Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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