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Lucas Maximus Posted March 30, 2008 Report Share Posted March 30, 2008 General Card Errors (from top to bottom:)- Remember to cap the first letter in each word in the card name.- An 8 stared monster with only 2000 ATK and 1900 DEF? Decrease the star level to 6.- The card image could be better; give it a background perhaps? Private message me if you would like me to do so.- OVERHEAT edition? For a LIGHT monster? - The first letter in Warrior should be capped in the card-type. - Capital letters? Don't they teach you these things at school.Moving on to OCG errors:- Normal Summoned or Set, not Normal Summoned Set- So this card can be Special Set? You have not stated otherwise. - by the effect, not due to the effect- Don't start sentences right after a full stop. Finger Spaces. - Duel, not duel. (I may be wrong about this one though)overview:Nicely thought out card with a relativity decent image, all you need to improve on is how you structure a card and your OCG (a little.)Besides those errors (pointed out above) this card doesn't seem to bad; I can see good things from you in the future. =D6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
FoolMeNever Posted March 30, 2008 Report Share Posted March 30, 2008 I think the reason it's an 8 star Monster is because of its effect. But other than that, Lucas nailed all of them. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
overheat Posted March 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 thx an bumb Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest JoshIcy Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 did you forget the card needed to summon this card? 3/10 until i see that card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tefached Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 picture credit? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
overheat Posted March 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 its from google so i dont know Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kouen Kitsune Posted April 1, 2008 Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 I liked it.The image is good and even though I'd like to see the card required to summon this, I won't hold it against you.10/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
overheat Posted April 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 i know i need the card that summones but i need a pic that is good with the name Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
overheat Posted April 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 General Card Errors (from top to bottom:)- Remember to cap the first letter in each word in the card name.- An 8 stared monster with only 2000 ATK and 1900 DEF? Decrease the star level to 6.- The card image could be better; give it a background perhaps? Private message me if you would like me to do so.- OVERHEAT edition? For a LIGHT monster? - The first letter in Warrior should be capped in the card-type. - Capital letters? Don't they teach you these things at school.Moving on to OCG errors:- Normal Summoned or Set' date=' not Normal Summoned Set- So this card can be Special Set? You have not stated otherwise. - by the effect, not due to the effect- Don't start sentences right after a full stop. Finger Spaces. - Duel, not duel. (I may be wrong about this one though)overview:Nicely thought out card with a relativity decent image, all you need to improve on is how you structure a card and your OCG (a little.)Besides those errors (pointed out above) this card doesn't seem to bad; I can see good things from you in the future. =D6/10[/quote'] you asked if i dont learn this things at school. no i dont . i my be an speak english well but cuz ower lame english teacher we dont learn all this things like grammer... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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