Faded Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 Attention: Must Read The Rules First.Rules1- There is to be NO rating given to this card! So no ?/10 or whatever.2 -Only suggestions on how to fix the grammar mistakes!3 -Dont say theres an error without first pointing it out! You may discuss ideas about the card, and suggest changes. Any breaking of the above rules will get you Neg'd! After I am satisfied with the result and changes, and everyone says its okay, then will it be added it to my card collection thread, and open to ratings there. [align=center]Remove 1 monster in your hand from play, and inflict 300 damage to your opponent's Life Points. When this monster is destroyed, your opponent must send 1 card from the top of his/her deck to the Graveyard for each monster removed from play by this cards effect.disclaimer: I do not own this picture. I only use this to enhance over overall quality of my card.[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Apocolypse Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 The grammar looks ok to me, I think you did a fine job overall. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 the ocg is fine. The effect is not origional, but pretty balanced. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Faded Posted March 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 Thank you! EDIT;@hunter: what is not original about it? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 You summon it, then you lose cards and then you inflict damage to your opponent. that does not seem very origional to me. That is just my opinion though. Maybe you could add something to it, maybe something dealing with the cards removed. How about when it dies by a card effect, you can discard some more cards or some cost to get one of those cards back. just spitball'n ideas. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Faded Posted March 31, 2008 Author Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 Yeah I guess so. The card isn't meant to be anything special, but I'll try work on a few more ideas to boost up its specialness :? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Huntar! Posted March 31, 2008 Report Share Posted March 31, 2008 okay. I am just trying to help ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroshot Posted April 1, 2008 Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 Agree with hunterb.pic is....good ?/? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Faded Posted April 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 Updated: The effect of Cosmelle has been changed so that Cosmelle's effect can be activated anytime, and when its destroyed you can remove cards from your opponents deck too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
SOUL Posted April 1, 2008 Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 Very , Very nice Faded! Really like it! ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Faded Posted April 1, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 1, 2008 Thanks Mod. I hope you all realize that I made this monster to be used in a deck with "Heart of the Underdog" in it, and lots of my Forgotten Monsters. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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