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ABABCDCDEFEFGG rhyme scheme + iambic pentameter = Shakespearean Sonnet.

 

 

Once long ago, in unknown foreign land

David raised each of his animals well

His neighbor Jacob tilled the fields by hand

And shared all with all around as equals

 

Cousin Ruth set beaver traps through the night

For Daniel to transform to coats and hats

To keep everyone warm through the long winter

Yet such a state was never meant to last

 

Now Daniel salts all of Jacob's best fields

So as to sell his meat at highest price

Not even one of Ruth's traps now still yields;

Daniel killed her over a game of dice

 

The land now dead, none of its history

Shows in its musty just-built factory

 

 

Meh. Not great.

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better than mine....DIBBED....was it made by you? If so' date=' +5 reps

 

 

and, um, what does it mean?

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I just wrote it right now, so...yeah, it's mine. If you don't believe me, Google a random line from it and watch as nothing whatsoever comes up.

 

And what it means is... capitalism sucks.

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better than mine....DIBBED....was it made by you? If so' date=' +5 reps

 

 

and, um, what does it mean?

[/quote']

 

I just wrote it right now, so...yeah, it's mine. If you don't believe me, Google a random line from it and watch as nothing whatsoever comes up.

 

And what it means is... capitalism sucks.

 

If he didn't give you 5 for that, I would give you another. Thats well written + has a good message.

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better than mine....DIBBED....was it made by you? If so' date=' +5 reps

 

 

and, um, what does it mean?

[/quote']

 

I just wrote it right now, so...yeah, it's mine. If you don't believe me, Google a random line from it and watch as nothing whatsoever comes up.

 

And what it means is... capitalism sucks.

 

If he didn't give you 5 for that, I would give you another. Thats well written + has a good message.

 

He gave me 2. Thank you.

 

Also, the poem was partially inspired by you. I needed to think of a topic, and your views came to mind.

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better than mine....DIBBED....was it made by you? If so' date=' +5 reps

 

 

and, um, what does it mean?

[/quote']

 

I just wrote it right now, so...yeah, it's mine. If you don't believe me, Google a random line from it and watch as nothing whatsoever comes up.

 

And what it means is... capitalism sucks.

 

High 5.

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better than mine....DIBBED....was it made by you? If so' date=' +5 reps

 

 

and, um, what does it mean?

[/quote']

 

I just wrote it right now, so...yeah, it's mine. If you don't believe me, Google a random line from it and watch as nothing whatsoever comes up.

 

And what it means is... capitalism sucks.

 

If he didn't give you 5 for that, I would give you another. Thats well written + has a good message.

 

He gave me 2. Thank you.

 

Also, the poem was partially inspired by you. I needed to think of a topic, and your views came to mind.

 

:)

 

*Internet Hug*

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