Captain Usopp Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 [align=center]Hey, I made a new card Well it's my second card but who cares :D So not much to say but here it is Demon Of Tartarus Effect : This card cannot be Normal summoned or set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 DARK monsters.When this card destroys a monster in battle you may draw 1 card from your deck. When the drawed card is :Monster - Decrease ATK of this monster by 200 then your opponents must remove 1 card from his hand from play.Spell - This monster ATK is decreased by 500 until end of this turn and you may draw 2 cards from your deck.Trap - This monster attack twice during the same Battle Phase. During the 2nd Stand By Phase this card is destroyed. Credit : Pamansazz[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 1. Post a disclaimer. 2. Post artist credit/link. 3. OCG could use some work. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Captain Usopp Posted April 28, 2008 Author Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Well Browarod i posted Credit and well I'm new with cards so don't be harsh :D It is my second card you know ? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Giga Hand Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Not bad. Balanced, if not underpowered, though. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rawlyn Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 I like it! :)Only a couple of errors that I can see (not that I see everything always lol)... It should say "Set" not "set", and "drawed" isn't a word. To get around this, you'll need to rephrase that part of the effect - I recommend having a look at Neo-Spacian Glow Moss or something similar to see how Konami phrase it. Nice way to credit the artist as well - links are way better than just names! (I'm sure the artist will be grateful for a few extra hits on his/her page!) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Well Browarod i posted Credit and well I'm new with cards so don't be harsh :D It is my second card you know ?You are right, my mistake. And, I wasn't being harsh. All I said was your OCG needed some work, which it did. If you follow the suggestions Rawlyn gave, it'll fix the errors. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Yu-Gi-Oh Fanatic Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 I see a new Wicked card in the making Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Typhoon brightness Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Hmm. you need a disclaimer but otherwise okay. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Rawlyn Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Hmm. you need a disclaimer but otherwise okay. Why does it need a disclaimer? Credit is given - he even gives a link to the artist's deviantart page - that's more than most people do! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hennjo Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 When the drawed card is this should say "if the card is a ..."otherwise good, if a bit underpowered. great pic 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larxene Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 i like this card! ^-^OCG needs fixing, but good job!9/10! ^-^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chevalier Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 3. OCG could use some work. Being a Moderator' date=' you should point out the mistakes. Well the image is a bit strange. Not a bad card. Correct OCG:This card cannot be Normal Summoned or Set. This card cannot be Special Summoned except by Tributing 3 DARK monsters you control. When this card destroys a monster as a result of battle. you may draw 1 card from your deck. Reveal that card, and based on its type apply the proper effect: Monster - This card's ATK is decreased by 200 until the End Phase of this turn. Your opponent randomly removes 1 card in their hand from play. Spell - This card's ATK is decreased by 500 until End Phase of this turn. Draw 2 cards from your deck.Trap - This monster can attack twice during the same Battle Phase. During your 2nd Standby Phase after activating this card's effect, this card is destroyed. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
v8561v Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Well,balanced.Some minor hidden OCG errors in some places,but is good enough to take it. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted April 28, 2008 Report Share Posted April 28, 2008 Looks more like a Fiend to me... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
hennjo Posted April 29, 2008 Report Share Posted April 29, 2008 looks more like a dragon to me Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Professor Cobra Posted April 29, 2008 Report Share Posted April 29, 2008 It's okay, a little overpowered. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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