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reborn god doesnt have a type, the dragon is overpowered, and ultimate white angel has a description and an effect.

in attack trap attack is spelt wrong, and its "when a monster", not "when some monster" the punctuation in the end of apple should be a period not an exclamation mark. in apple of power it should be "select 1 monster" not "you have to choose one monster". in Nature Magician the description should start with the word 'A'. In Bloody Wolf the description should start with the letter 'A'. In Spellcaster trap the effect should be written "When this card is activated destroy all cards on your opponent's side of the field.", and it should not be a quick play card since it is already a trap. All of your cards are poor in grammar they should end with periods not exclamation marks. The effect of Monster Trap should be written "When this card is activated, select 1 monster on your opponents side of the field and destroy it.", Ultimate White Angel Sword's name should be written "Ultimate White Angel's Sword, and it's effect should be written "This Equip Spell Card can only be equiped to 'Ultimate White Angel'. Increase the ATK and DEf of the equiped card by 500 points".

 

I'm sorry to say but these are poorly done 4/10

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I'm sorry, but I must agree with bhim. Some of the effects make no sense whatsoever. Some of the cards are good ideas, but all have bad grammar. There are several typos.

 

By the way, never put an exclamation point at the end. That's not realistic at all.

 

1/10

 

Take your "Spellcaster Trap" card for instance. To make it realistic, you should word it like this:

 

"When you activate this card, destroy all Spellcaster-type monsters on your opponent's side of the field."

P.S. There's no such thing as a quick-play trap card.

 

My favorite idea is probably "Reborn God," which most likely would be a Spellcaster-type monster.

 

You should word the effect like this:

 

"When this card is destroyed as a result of battle, you may special summon 1 monster from your graveyard."

 

Mostly why people don't like them is because they are carelessly done. If you want to keep this in the "Realistic Cards" forum, you'll have to be more careful when typing them up.

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