Proffesser Yugi Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 It was a nice day at battle city until some dark clouds gatered up and turned it to the shadow realm jaden said"what is that."He didn't know much about the shadow realm.Jaden looked ar his card question and he thaught about using it.He thought until he run out of i deas.He felt some poision and ran he ran and ran he got himself in acient eygpt and it was strange.to be continuedsorry it's extermely short. part 2At ancient eygpt there was lot's of stuff but broken.as soon as the dark clouds stoped he was back at battle city.he new it was a special day for duel academey but there was only one thing creepy the darkness!he felt a hand on his shoe but there was nothing there.he tried to walk but something was wrong was it the poision noto be continued Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Typhoon brightness Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 ummm..WhAT? Where Was we?? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proffesser Yugi Posted May 6, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 i am editing it Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aozora Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 I'm not sure something that short can be called a fic. (Does Kiba voice from Naruto Abridged)Dude, you like so copied my fanfic's title! See! They both say they're about Yugioh GX at the start. And your's uses the word 'darkness' and so does mine. That's not cool, dude. They're even both the third word in the title. So... not... excellent....(Sorry, couldn't resist making a stupid joke.)[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Impact™ Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 man that was short lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atomix Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 if that was the chapter, i will shoot you lol Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted May 6, 2008 Report Share Posted May 6, 2008 Please tell me that was the intro. So far, it isn't the best. Check your grammer. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proffesser Yugi Posted May 7, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 7, 2008 it was the intro Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atomix Posted May 7, 2008 Report Share Posted May 7, 2008 so your alive, but now if the first chapter is small, i will shoot you with a AK-47 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted May 7, 2008 Report Share Posted May 7, 2008 try to make the 1st chapter longer,because this is when you get your earliest fans. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Proffesser Yugi Posted May 8, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 8, 2008 okay chpter 1 will be posted in one hour Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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