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animetor07 Newbie

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there are ocg errors on all 3 of those cards, but you've already pointed that out lol.. the effect of fire star worrior is op'd, unless:

1) have its effect activate only when ur opponent targets it with a spell/trap because unless the opponent has to, they wouldn't target it knowing that it would increase its ATK anyways.

2) do not negate its effect.. although, it would be pretty pointless then lol. well, it would still be useful somehow...

3) aside from #2, you could also restrict its effect, and by this i mean to make the player discard a card or pay life points, etc.

Overall score, 5.5/10

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Wyhe Newbie

Wyhe

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ok first of all look at the first card in my set you will see "Speed World #2" soo that means that i can take that card too

 

If so,then just put card effect to search for "Speed World #2"...unless you are attempting a speed world 3 or 4 or whatever

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~ P O L A R I S ~ Newbie

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Speed World #2: Speed World #2 won't work as a field spell card, you can only have one field spell card in play at a time, so you'll have to make it a Continuous Spell. Also, does shouldn't be capitalized.

 

Sand Machine: Tribute should be tributed, it shouldn't be capitalized. Monster should not be capitalized, nor should field. Choose should be Select. Iriginal should be original. Def should be DEF, then you're good.

 

Fire Star Worrier: You misspelled warrior. It should be "when this card is selected as a target by a Spell or Trap card. Don't put a period between Trap card and negate, put a comma.

 

I'll add more fixes later, gotta go now.

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Sure, but you should still update them.

 

True Speed: Change effect to the following: Add 1 "Speed World" from your deck to your hand.

 

Hand and deck are not capitalized, and look is never used.

 

Lavio The Speed Warrior: Don't capitalize "the" in the card name. In the type add a space between the slash after Warrior and Tuner. Life Points are capitalized. Use a comma between Points and choose, and you should probably change choose to select as well.

 

Holly Doll: To make it more realistic, you could change the Doll type to Spellcaster, although you can keep the Doll type for fun purposes if you want. Monster iss not capitalized, Life Points are capitalized.

 

Tuner Signal: Monster is not capitalized, send should be sent, and result is misspelled. The second time you typed monster, you capitalized it, don't do that. You should also end an "s" on the end for the plural. Decrease is misspelled and so is their.

 

Hell Demon: Make it a Fiend, since Fiend and Demon are pretty much exactly the same. I'm going to re-do the effect for you, ok? Here:

 

"1 Tuner Monster + 1 or more non-Tuner monsters"

At the time this card is selected as an attack target by your opponent's monster. select one Level 2 monster on your side of the field. Add the selected monster's ATK to the ATK of this card until the end of the Battle Phase.

 

Speed Master: Monster is not capitalized, monster is only capitalized when used in "Effect Monster","Normal Monster","Ritual Monster", or "Fusion Monster." When used alone it is not capitalized. Use a comma, not a period between monsters and increase. Don't use points after ATK, simply use ATK. Summoned is not capitalized by itself, only in "Special Summoned," "Normal Summoned," Tribute Summoned," etc. Only use 1 question mark in the ATK and DEF.

 

Ok, looks like you're all patched up, your OCG could be better, but everything is fairly balanced, nice work. ^_^

 

8.3/10

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