tommers2008 Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 hers my 1st 7cards tell me what you tink!!! ps. this is not my artwork i got it off different sites on the net which i dont no name of!! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiinferno Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 BansheeSoul who disturbs or souls who disturb? I think the latter would work better. Death Dragon"attacks," <- Implement comma here"def" should change to either "Defence/Defense" (ce= UK, se=US sp.) OR alternatively "DEF" in capitals. The full word is probably better since here you're not referring to the stat on the card. "." should go after 'phase' not after 'battle'. Elf ArchersHmmm possibly Elven kingdom instead of Elf kingdom... Or not, whichever is fine I guess. Iron Dragon"ATK" not "atk". "It also" instead of the "and" after the period. "And" can sometimes go after a period in certain circumstances... This isn't one of them :\ DJ-Fairy :P"face down defense/defence/DEF position" <- Implement. Where there is a "/" that indicates a choice, do not use all of that replacement OCG :\ Golden PhoenixWrite "PHOENIX SHOT" in the summoning instructions since that's how it is written on the actual card and you have used quotation marks. If you use quotation marks it must be the same! "Defence/Defense/DEF" again... Old story is old now, you must get it :P Phoenix ShotNeeds a "." at the end. Other than that, they seem fine to me ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted May 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 yea i no deres a few mistakes!! thanks for pointing them out it will help me with further cards!!!heres 2 more i just made cud you tel me wat u tink of these!! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
antiinferno Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 Good ideas, OCG corrections... Call of Dragons: At the cost of 1000 life points, gain control of all dragon type monsters on the field. Peaceful Dragon: Boost the ATK and DEF of all dragon type monster on the field. In addition, for every end phase which this monster reaches remaining in face up attack position, increase the ATK and DEF of all dragon type monsters by a further 150 points. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
TUT Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 You've got the right idea, but you need to fix it up a little. Remember to capitalize your sentences and card names! 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted May 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 thanks again !! i will be relasing another 10 shortly!!! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
.Requiem Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 Pretty good cards for your first try. Good pics, pretty good balance and ok effects. 8/10 :lol::o Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted May 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 thanks x-31, be shur to check out my next set 10more!!! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroshot Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 Ok, I know your new and everything so don't take this the wrong way. Pictures are well................................BadEvery letter except for "the" "or" for" Ect. need to be capitolized in the name.Dragon-Type not dragons.Increase not boost.all summons need to be capitolized such as Ritual Summoned, Special Summon, Tribute Summon, Normal Summon, Set, Flip Summon ect.Also, that didn't get into the OCG in the first post. My Rating: 3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tommers2008 Posted May 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 yea virus i respect what you say but i tink the pictures are good!!!! ive changed alot of the card grammer and wil be reposting my cards plz drop by an check what you tink then !!!!!!! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zeroshot Posted May 23, 2008 Report Share Posted May 23, 2008 Well, about the pics..... Banshee: Border and artist logo/sigDeath Dragon: Pic does not reach the full size of the card.Elf Archers: Border and artist logo/sigIron Dragon: GoodJester Fairy: artist logo/sigPhoenix: GoodRitual Card: artist sig/logoCall of Dragons: Border and artist logo/sigDragon: Good.You don't want borders or artist's sigs/logos. Just doesn't make the card look realistic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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