Bahumut Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 This card cannot be Special Summoned. This card can only be Normal Summoned by Tributing 3 DARK monsters on your side of the field, including at least 1 "Demonlord" card. The Attribute of this card is also treated as FIRE. If this card would be destroyed, you may send the top 5 cards of your deck to the Graveyard so that this card is not destroyed this is only the first card of the set. pic came from photo bucket here's the next card. a strong level 4 monsterthe 3rd and 4th card demonlord supporta card to help draw get those demonlords Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
N00B Hunter Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 You want him to be Normal Summoned, but still be the 3-card tribute.. the OCG is really bad, so I can reqrite the effect here: 'This card cannot be Special Summoned. This card can only be Normal Summoned by Tributing 3 DARK monsters on your side of the field, including at least 1 "Demonlord" card. The Attribute of this card is also treated as FIRE. If this card would be destroyed, you may send the top 5 cards of your deck to the Graveyard so that this card is not destroyed.' With the primary effect (summoning condition) it shows that the card should be strong. However, the secondary effect (stall ability) makes it sound as though the monster had low ATK. You're making too many cool-looking, high-level cards, a mistake many junior YCMers make. Make some low-level cards, and some Spell & Traps that aren't complete field wipes, before you make cards like above (and it shouldn't be cards, just card if you get my meaning.. only 1 card like this per set, and the rest need to be weaker) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Senbanzakura Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 I agree with Noob Hunter, he said all that needs to be said. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 Pic is kinda overused too. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
White Devil Posted June 18, 2008 Report Share Posted June 18, 2008 A little bit overpowered but nice, cool pic, 7/10 ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahumut Posted June 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 You want him to be Normal Summoned' date=' but still be the 3-card tribute.. the OCG is really bad, so I can reqrite the effect here: 'This card cannot be Special Summoned. This card can only be Normal Summoned by Tributing 3 DARK monsters on your side of the field, including at least 1 "Demonlord" card. The Attribute of this card is also treated as FIRE. If this card would be destroyed, you may send the top 5 cards of your deck to the Graveyard so that this card is not destroyed.' With the primary effect (summoning condition) it shows that the card should be strong. However, the secondary effect (stall ability) makes it sound as though the monster had low ATK. You're making too many cool-looking, high-level cards, a mistake many junior YCMers make. Make some low-level cards, and some Spell & Traps that aren't complete field wipes, before you make cards like above (and it shouldn't be cards, just card if you get my meaning.. only 1 card like this per set, and the rest need to be weaker)[/quote'] this is the strongest card in the set so yeah all the others are going to be weaker. thanks for the ocg tip ill fix it right away Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahumut Posted June 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 new cards plz rate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
N00B Hunter Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 you rewrote the card effect for "Daalani" in text, but you didn't change the actual effect... for card names, you need a space between the guys name and "Demonlord" (Ex: it's "Jawalzar - Demonlord" instead of "Jawalzar-Demonlord"). Your OCG is off in quite a few other places, I can't list all of them... decrease Damor's DEF to something more like 2000 (with an effect like "Metalsilver Armor", you need to balance it with weakness in battle). Also, you haven't specified in your effect where you Special Summon your "Demonlord" monster from (the Graveyard, your Hand, Deck, what?). Fix those before I rate again. You already have too many high-level "Demonlord" monsters, make "Dran" a 4-star and make the ATK increase 200 or 300 (depending on what you decide from the next paragraph). Alright, you need to make a choice. The cards you've shown me make your set look like an aggro-style set (high-ATK monsters; ATK boost cards). However, "Damor", your coolest-looking card, has an effect and stats that aren't aggro... he doesn't support the strategy. Which do you want, a Defensive-style set or an offensive-style set. If you want the first one, then you need to recreate all of your cards except "Damor". If you're for the latter, then "Damor" needs to be remade into an aggro-style card. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Skylarman1 Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 pics overused, ive used it and seen it like 4 times, ocg is mehh, somewhat overpowered6/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahumut Posted July 3, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 3, 2008 bump plz rate Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Raiken Kisuki Posted July 3, 2008 Report Share Posted July 3, 2008 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
~ Chidori-Kun Posted July 3, 2008 Report Share Posted July 3, 2008 Overused pics Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
acdcfan1276 Posted July 3, 2008 Report Share Posted July 3, 2008 i agree with N00B Hunter Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RobbieG1o11 Posted July 3, 2008 Report Share Posted July 3, 2008 The first picture is overused.But they are all cool. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bahumut Posted July 9, 2008 Author Report Share Posted July 9, 2008 bump i need more feed back and ideas for new cards would be nice new card Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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