Gogeta™ Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 I need some help on a story I'm working on heres the link to it http://mriku.webs.com/. So far people doent like the story so would you be intrested in helping me make this story better? If you do help I'll give 2 rep every week as a thank you token. If you have any changes that you think would help PLEASE point them out. Thank you for your time. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 After seeing the chracters,I have formulated a rough plot line. -Jiku saved people with cyborg powers-Jiku reconciled with Roku,who would help him along with James-Meanwhile,Cyber commisioned Mriku to make weapons-Cyber eventually kidnaps James -Jiku makes it priority to save James,but fails (he died for not helping Cyber)-Jiku turned evil,only to bestopped by Roku-Cyber & Mriku succeeds in weapons-Cyber uses weapons forevil-Mriku opposes them,but was injured badly-The 3 brothwea were reunited to stop Cyber-After the whole thing,the 3 brothers are a happy family How about that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gogeta™ Posted June 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 Wow...thoes are good plot lines. Off of topic: how'd you change your name WHYE? Is that a perk to having so many stars? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 Wow...thoes are good plot lines. Off of topic: how'd you change your name WHYE? Is that a perk to having so many stars?OMG!!!Why everyone misarrange my inintials?It's W-Y-H--E,that stands for Wong Yu Hin Eugene! and you can change your user name at any time,just PM a mod,but you can only do it once every 3 monthes. and yes,I know that they are good plots.Just make sure you put in emotions in it & watch more novels & movies for examples. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gogeta™ Posted June 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 -___- sorry WYHE. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Wyhe Posted June 19, 2008 Report Share Posted June 19, 2008 Now you got it right. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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