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TIBONE LUIS

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You can special summon this monster by removing"The Deadly Sin-Avarice" in your graveyard from play. During each turn that one of your opponents monster(s) was destroyed by a DARK/fiend-type monster on your side of the field you ma draw one card from your deck. This card cannot be special summoned from the graveyard.

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Not overpowered, but it needs some OCG and grammar fix ups.

 

Whenever you put a monster's Attribute and type together you need to do it like this: DARK Attribute Fiend-Type monster.

 

Opponents need an apostrphy(<-I can't spell that word for some reason): opponent's

 

Special Summoned and Graveyard are always capitalized.

 

The word "may" in the third sentence is missing its final letter.

 

Try "you control" instead of "on your side of the field.

 

Add a comma between "field" and "you" in the third sentence.

 

As for errors, that all I can spot.

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Zorc, you are not allowed to post your cards in other people's threads. Reported.

 

There is no card in the English TCG called "Deadly Sin-Avarice", and you haven't made a card of the likeness.. and you've made the mistake of making the circulation LIMITED EDITION, yet not having a gold sticker -- remove the circulation.

 

Your card has too-high of stats for a lvl 5, and also high stats for an Grave-RFP summoning card... Finally, your card has an effect of incredible advantage, giving a result-of-battle effect for one of the most aggro-oriented kinds of monsters out there...

 

All in all, overpowered.

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