The Dark Master Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 This is my first attempt at a Fan-Fic, so I am not sure if it will be any good. So far, I will only make the intro. If it seems good enough...Then yeah... [spoiler=Characters for the Intro]1) Krad [Forgotten Seventh Samurai]2) Yaichi [six Samurai] - Archer3) Kamon [six Samurai] - Demolitionist4) Yariza [six Samurai] - Swift Warrior5) Nisashi [six Samurai] - Double Bladed Warrior6) Zanji [six Samurai] - Heavy Weaponry / Strong Warrior7) Irou [six Samurai] - Cocky Dark Warrior8.) Fallen Eighth Samurai [died in battle]9) Gilford [spoiler=Cards for the Added Characters] As all of your probably know' date=' the card game "Duel Monsters" was based on real monsters Ancient Egyptian Sorcerers used to use for the basis of battle. They summoned them from a different dimension...but that means that there must have been a time when they origonally owned the dimension that was used to summon them, but then they got moved to another dimension by the powerful Pharoah [Yami Yugi']. *Personal cut in: Everyone knows the Six Samurai cards, right...? Haven't you always wondered if there was more...? Well I have and thsi is what I came up with* [it is night][align=left] "Do you guys know what you are doing?" said Krad."You doubt us...?" said Irou."Not at all, but do YOU know what YOU'RE doing?""Of course..." said Irou. Krad slowly crept along the wall of the enemy base, followed by the rest of the "Six Samurais". They were trying to infiltrate the base and save "The Fallen Eighth Samurai" who was kidnapped in the Great Battle [appearing in a later part]. "Yaichi, watchmen!" whispered Yariza swiftly. Yaichi quickly shoots his arrows at the 3 guards. "Done," said Yaichi."How are we going to get in...?" said Krad."Leave that to me," sneered Kamon. Kamon threw a bomb at the door. "I'm sure everyone in the whole castle heard that..." said Krad. They entered the castle... How is it so far...? Is it good for my first try...? Should I continue...? Thanks ^^[/align] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Umbra Posted June 26, 2008 Report Share Posted June 26, 2008 Good for a first one. However, you change tempus, which isn't good. Also, mistypes here and there cut down the general feel. But I'm just being harsh. It was good. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
The Dark Master Posted June 27, 2008 Author Report Share Posted June 27, 2008 Thanks...I guess...=S Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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