My first cards

[RobbieG1o11]

I'm new and these are the first cards I made.

They are probably a little overpowered. And I need to redo some of the wording.

And as I said, they are my firsts so that's why they aren't that great.

Feedback is encouraged!

 

These pictures came from various artists on DeviantArt and they are not mine in anyway. I only used them to improve the quality of my cards.

 

(These are the most recent edited versions)

 

[Amethyst Phoenix]

attack points= ATK

defense points = DEF

 

hmm, I have a spell in my newest set very similar to mage summon its a cool idea.

 

6/10 not bad

[Silencerleader]

4/10. ^^What he/she said.

-But...the pics...need adjustments.

-The effects...need help in ^^What he/she said.

[dangweasle]

You have pretty good OCG (official card grammer) for a new member. I think the speed strike ninja should have his DEF lowered and there should be some cost to summon him. Also the Spellcasters defense spell should increse your monsters ATK by 1000, 2000 is pretty over powered. And the idea for Mage's summon is genius. If the ocg for that card was perfect, that would be a real card. Overall, 7/10.

[RobbieG1o11]

You have pretty good OCG (official card grammer) for a new member. I think the speed strike ninja should have his DEF lowered and there should be some cost to summon him. Also the Spellcasters defense spell should increse your monsters ATK by 1000' date=' 2000 is pretty over powered. And the idea for Mage's summon is genius. If the ocg for that card was perfect, that would be a real card. Overall, 7/10.

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Thanks for the compliment.

And I am planning on editing all the things pointed out in this thread.

And as for cost of the strike ninja, what do you think that should be?

 

@Scilencerleader: What do you men by the pics need adjustments? I think they are pretty good.

[The Ruby]

always happy to meet a new member ^_^

 

Ruby here ;), if you ever need any help just PM me ;)

 

and at the cards, i see some OCG errors, if you need help with that you can also PM me ^_^

[Bankz]

there not that bad but the speed strike ninja def doesn,t macth the attack its kinda unusual but i like it and the spells and speeds efect is nice 9 out of 10 from me

[moonwalk 2000]

7/10 pic 10/10 OCG 6/10 balance

[RobbieG1o11]

I edited them all, I still think they could use some work.

More feedback please!

[The Ruby]

cap 1st letter in a monster type:

 

Sellcaster

[RobbieG1o11]

cap 1st letter in a monster type:

 

Sellcaster

 

Ugh.

D;

Ill fix that.

 

(it's spelt Spellcaster.)

xD

[The Ruby]

lol, oops, and change one to 1

[N00B Hunter]

"Bankz" -- reported.

 

"Defense Spell" is definetely overpowered -- +1000/1000 is killer... Just think: Your "Breaker the Magical Warrior" could now have 2600 or 2900 ATK (remember, "Breaker" is level 4..)! And a Spell Card discard is useless as a sustainment requirement. After all, it just takes 1 turn to wipe the field or deal some heavy damage... And last time I checked, Spellcaster-Type monsters didn't even focus on aggro. So, this card is definetely broken.

 

"Mage's Summon" has some problem -- it doesn't give the full card status (not just ATK & DEF, but the Attribute, Type, and level all need to be included). Not only that, but you could equip a monster, then destroy the Equip Spell and you wouldn't lose your token -- This card is basically "Scapegoat" with a bonus and manipulation ability.

 

I love the picture of "Speed Strike" -- even though it's not realistic at all... ^_^

However, decrease the DEF, capitalize the first letters in "Tribute Summoned" and this card will be great!

 

Your only problem is that you're confusing Attribute Strategies. Spellcasters don't deal aggro, and the basic Wind Strategy is field control, not aggro... just pay attention to the cards that the TCG already has out, and build off their strategies...

But great start! :mrgreen:

[RobbieG1o11]

"Bankz" -- reported.

 

"Defense Spell" is definetely overpowered -- +1000/1000 is killer... Just think: Your "Breaker the Magical Warrior" could now have 2600 or 2900 ATK (remember' date=' "Breaker" is level 4..)! And a Spell Card discard is useless as a sustainment requirement. After all, it just takes 1 turn to wipe the field or deal some heavy damage... And last time I checked, Spellcaster-Type monsters didn't even focus on aggro. So, this card is definetely broken.

 

"Mage's Summon" has some problem -- it doesn't give the full card status (not just ATK & DEF, but the Attribute, Type, and level all need to be included). Not only that, but you could equip a monster, then destroy the Equip Spell and you wouldn't lose your token -- This card is basically "Scapegoat" with a bonus and manipulation ability.

 

I love the picture of "Speed Strike" -- even though it's not realistic at all... ^_^

However, decrease the DEF, capitalize the first letters in "Tribute Summoned" and this card will be great!

 

Your only problem is that you're confusing Attribute Strategies. Spellcasters don't deal aggro, and the basic Wind Strategy is field control, not aggro... just pay attention to the cards that the TCG already has out, and build off their strategies...

But great start! :mrgreen:

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Wow.

O:

I didnt know there was so much to this, I just threw them together.

But thanks for the information and tips!

[waza-b]

Pictures are amateur but you are a new member, ocg was better than myn (probably still is hahaha) when i started, good effort,

 

7/10

[RobbieG1o11]

I have edited these for the last time, I think they have improved greatly and are way more realistic. Thanks for all the input. I would still like to hear opinions though!

[lalolalo]

Ok I didn't see the original cards, but for I see now...

 

I'm only use the Pic, effect and OCG this time.

 

Spell Caster's Defense Spell.

 

Pic: LOVE IT! - 10/10

Effect: It seems you take the feedback and used it. Well done. Also now, discarding a Spell Card while having a Spellcaster is a good way to balance the 0/+1000 bonus, it is just 1000 DEF so it is good. - 8.2/10

OCG: You need to cap some words like: Spell Card and maybe using "During each of your Draw Phases (after your draw).". - 7.1/10 (Very good for a new member)

 

Mage's Summon

 

Pic: If LOVE this even more, if that's possible - 10/10

Effect: If the tokens can be used as a Tribute Summon or Set, then this card is way TOO overpowered, if not, it is very good. - 6.7/10 (If you fix the tokens thing) 8.6/10

OCG: Again, cap first letter on Summon, Graveyard, etc... 6.7/10

 

Speed Strike Ninja - Defense Destruction

 

Pic: I don't know why but, even it is very simplistic I really liked this pic - 9.4/10

Effect: Very balanced according to its ATK and DEF, that's good - 8.6/10

OCG: Don't write the number's name, put 1 instead of one, and 2 instead of two, End Phase, etc... 6.9/10

 

Spell Caster's Defense Spell - 25.3/30

Mage's Summon - 23.4/30

Speed Strike Ninja - Defense Destruction - 24.9/30

 

Overall - 73.6/90 = 8.1/10

 

But there is one thing, that I just can't stand... please please PLEASE put a disclaimer or give the pic's autor the credits.

 

I have to take one point for that, sorry.

 

So my rate is 7.1/10

 

Remember to put a disclaimer or give the credits. XD

[RobbieG1o11]

Whaaah!

I forgot to do that!

Eeep!

Ill fix that.

And Ill try to work on the cards, even though I said they were done.

xD