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Jumper: The True Chronicles. PG-13

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[align=center]This Fan Fiction Is Based On A Dream I Had And I Decided To Elaborate.

 

~Intro~

 

Everyone's Seen Jumper, Right?

Well Story Of My Life.

It Started Out Nothing Like That.

*Setting Changes From Forest To Track Field.*

Coach: "Ok Alex, If You Win This You Win It All." "Make Me Proud."

Alex: "Ok, Ill Try My Best."

*Alex Focuses On The End Of The Field.*

Announcer: "Begin!"

*Alex Jumps To The End Of The Track Field.*

Alex: "Oh S***"

*Crowd Mumbles*

Alex: "What The Hell?"

Coach: "He...Teleported!"

*Crowd Chases After Him*

Alex: "Go...go...go!!!"

*With A Burst Of Wind He Teleports To The Middle Of Camden Yards*

*Gets Hit By A Line Drive*

Alex: "What The Hell Is Going On Here?"

*Realizing What Just Happened*

*Alex Smirks*

*Teleports With A Cheerful "See Ya" *

 

~Chapter 1~

 

Alex: "Ok, Alex Its Time To Try These Powers Out For Real."

*A African-American Man In About His 40's Walks Overs. He Is Wearing A Blue And Silver Ball Cap With Jean Shorts And An Oriole's T-Shirt*

Pedestrian: "Are You Ok Kid?"

Alex: "Yeah, I'm Fine."

Pedestrian: "Thats Good. My Name's Max."

Alex: "Hi."

Max: "Yours?"

Alex: "Oh, Sorry My Name's Alex."

Max: "....."

Alex: "Are You Ok Sir"

Max: "You Say Your Name Is Alex? As In Alex Flashix?"

Alex: "Yes...How Did You Know My Name?"

Max: "Follow Me."

*As The Word "Me" Comes To An End The Man Teleports To The Top Row Of The Camden Yard's Center Field Seating Area*

*Alex Is Astonished*

Alex: "Oh Jesus."

*Alex Jumps Through The Jump Scar Causing Him To Show Up Right Next To Max*

Max: "Haha, You Seem Surprised."

Alex: "You Can Jump?!"

Max: "Yes And So Can Others."

Alex: "What Do You Mean?"

Max: "I Am The Leader Of A Group Called 'Sorcerers'." "We Can All Jump, Just Like You And I."

Alex: "But..."

Max: "Im Going To Train You. Your Father Was Part Of Our Group. Our Best Jumper. Now Its Up To You, To Fufill His Goal."

Alex: "How'd You Find Me?"

Max: "Kid, When Your A Jumper It's Hard Not To Find Someone."

*Max Jumps On Top Of A Passing By Bus*

Max: "You Coming?"

Alex: "This Should Be Good."

*Alex And Max Smirk At The Same Time*

*Alex Jumps Next To Max Brushing Off Some 'Jump Dust'*

Max: "This Is Where It Gets Good!"

*They Arrive At A Darkened Alley*

*The Walls Are Covered With Moss And The Pipes Are Ingraved With Rust*

Alex: "We Here?"

Max: "Yes We Are Here"

Alex: "So What Now?"

Max: "Test One."

*Max Teleports Alex To The Top Of Mnt.Everest*

*Leaving No Sign Of A Jump Scar, Alex Knew He Had To Get To The Bottom Without Gettng Hurt*

Alex: "S***"

 

~Chapter 2~

 

*He Thinks Of How To Get Down*

Alex: "Duh, Im A Jumper."

*Facepalm*

Alex: "Hiyah!"

*Alex Jumps To The Top Of A Ice Shard Sticking Out Of The Mountian*

Alex: "Crap!"

*He Was Wearing 'Shaq' Shoes At The Time So He Slipped.*

*Alex Was Falling Face First Into The Upcoming Ice Shards*

*With A Burst Of Wing And A Loud Scream He Jumped Face-First Into The Lair, Where Max Was Standing Above Him*

Alex: "Your A A**hole."

Max: "Sorry Alex But If You Wanna Be A 'Sorcerer' Then You Have To Complete Three Tasks."

Alex: "Can This One Be A Race?"

Max: "As A Matter Of Fact..."

*Max Teleports Alex Back In Time To The Chariot Races*

*A Gladiator Fight Was Starting As Max Left*

*Once Again No Jump Scar*

Alex: "D***it"

*Alex Jumps Past The Lion Charging At Him*

*He Heard Max's Voice In His Head, "Task Two, Jump Foward In Time" *

Alex: "How The Hell Am I Supposed To Do That?"

*A Lion Charges At Alex, Alex Couldnt Jump He Was Too Scared*

*The Lion Gets Tackled From A Woman Who Seemed To Come Out Of Nowhere*

*Alex Is Astonished*

*Alex Relizes That She's A Jumper To And So He Gazed At Her As She Wiped Lion's Blood Of Her Shoulder*

*The Woman Jumped, But Alex Saw That She Was Nowhere To Be Found*

*He Ran Through Her Jump Scar And It Brought Him Back To The Lair*

*He Saw Max Yelling At The Woman For Leaving Behind A Jump Scar*

Max: "D***it Lilli!"

*Alex Relized That The Woman's Name Was Lilli And Immediatly Jumped Up*

*Max And Lilli See That Alex Is Back At The Liar*

Max: "I Dont Think That Should Count, Lilli Here Left A Jump Scar."

Lilli: "Im Sorry Max."

*Lilli Rolls Her Gorgeous Blue Eyes*

*Lilli Was Wearing A Ladies Toga With Purple Flame Designs On The End Of It*

*Her Eyes Like An Ocean*

*And Her Bare Back Gave Gim Goosebumps*

*Alex Gazes At Her*

Max: "That's Not Going To Count."

Alex: "Yes It Is."

Max: "And Why Is That?"

*Max Becomes More Enraged*

Alex: "Because...S*** Happens."

*Alex Give Off A Smirk, Lilli Giggles*

*Max Punches Alex Right In The Face*

*Alex's Nose Starts Bleeding*

Alex: "What The Hell!"

*Alex Jumps Behind Max And Socks Him One In The Spinal Cord*

*Max Groans*

Max: "Task Three....Completed."

*Max Laughs Softly*

*Lilli Giggles Once More, While Alex Gives A Wierd Expression On His Face*

Alex: "You Guys Suck."

Max: "Haha, Sorry But It Happens To Everyone."

*Alex Is Furious, But Is Happy At The Same Time*

 

~Chapter 3~

 

Alex: "So What Now Do I Get A Cape Or Somethin?"

Lilli: "No, You Are A Sorcerer, You Dont Need A Cape."

Max: "Lilli Is One Of Our Best Jumpers."

Lilli: "So Much For Modesty."

Alex: "So Max, Are You The Best Jumper?"

Max: "No Your Father Is....Or...."

Alex: "Or What?!"

Max: "Was, Your Father Was Our Best Jumper."

Lilli: "....."

Max: "Im Sorry Alex"

Alex: "Hes Dead?!"

*Alex Flips Out While Lilli Heads For The Bathroom Silenly, Almost Without A Trace*

Max: "We Want You To Kill His Muderer."

Alex: "I Plan To."

Alex: "Why The Hell Did This Happen? First I Get Dumped By My Girlfriend Then I Find Out Im A Jumper, Then My Dad Dies. Whats Next?!"

Max: "Calm Down Alex."

*Alex Heads For The Bathroom As Well*

*Alex Bumps Into Lilli On The Way There, Falling On Top Of Her*

*They Both Dont Say Anything For A Second And A Half*

Alex: "...Im Sorry Let Me Get Up."

Lilli: "Its My Fault Sorry."

Lilli: "Your Kinda Cute, You Know That?"

Alex: "........"

*Max Chuckles*

Alex: "Ummm....Gotta Pee."

Lilli: "Haha Alright."

Those Words Rang In My Head All Night And All Day.

I Couldnt Help But Gaze At Her.

Lilli: "Youve Barely Talked To Me All Week."

Alex: "You Wanna Get Some Dinner?"

*Alex Shyly Asks, Lilli Pauses With Surprise Then Answers*

Lilli: ".....Took You Long Enough."

*Lilli Winks At Him*

Alex: "Max! Me And Lilli Are Going Out Be Back In A Couple Hours."

Max: "No Wait."

*Alex And Lilli Jump Before Max Could Stop Them*

*They Left No Sign Of A Jump Scar*

Max: ".....Kids."

*Alex And Lilli Arrive Outside Of A Fancy Resturant*

Alex: "So I Was Thinking We Start Out With A Supper Then Move On To Bed."

Lilli: "Sounds Good To Me."

Alex: "I Was Just Kidding Lilli."

Lilli: "I Know But I Wasnt."

*Lilli Jumps To The Top Of The Iffel Tower*

*Alex Jumps Through The Jump Scar Causing Him To Show Up Next To Lilli*

*It Is Dark, Romantic, And Lilli Has A Picnic Basket*

Alex: "Aww, What The Hell."

*Alex Kisses Lilli Romanticly*

*They Jump Through All The Most Romantic Spots In The World While They Kiss*

 

 

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Isn't there already a movie for this?

 

Well, I liked it, but like the others say it is very short and I think it is somewhat cheesy. (No offence)

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Charlie Morae's Official Rating

 

First Opinion: As I even read the first few sentences, I know that this will get a low rating. Talking Like This On A Regular Basis Must Be Difficult.

 

Spelling/Grammar: As pointed out above, capitalization needs to be fixed. Punctuation and commas need to be fixed/added.

 

Descriptions: None whatsoever. We have no idea what the characters look like, or what the environment around them looks like.

 

One-Word Summary: Retry.

 

Final Rating: 2/10.

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