Kale Posted August 12, 2008 Report Share Posted August 12, 2008 sorry, but I havnt ever seen Naruto, so I didn't understand much of the fic. I understand the point of Naruto though, I just dont know the story line... So I can't give as indepth of a rating as I would like too. :( One thing I did notice was that you could explain what was going on a bit more, like people walking to and from places, and peoples emotions, and such stuff like that. ^_^ That is all I can really point out, as I don't know that much of the Naruto world. But I hope you liked my critisism. I don't rate fan fics. But I do day that this is pretty nice from what I could understand. Just work a bit more on the narration. ;) -Kale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Chaos Master Ygo Posted August 12, 2008 Report Share Posted August 12, 2008 WoW, it's not bad it's kinda coolbut i also agree with Kale sorry' date=' but I havnt ever seen Naruto, so I didn't understand much of the fic. I understand the point of Naruto though, I just dont know the story line... So I can't give as indepth of a rating as I would like too. :( One thing I did notice was that you could explain what was going on a bit more, like people walking to and from places, and peoples emotions, and such stuff like that. ^_^ That is all I can really point out, as I don't know that much of the Naruto world. But I hope you liked my critisism. I don't rate fan fics. But I do day that this is pretty nice from what I could understand. Just work a bit more on the narration. ;) -Kale[/quote'] Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 18, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 18, 2008 Ep 6 will be up tommrow as I have no school Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
bury the year Posted August 18, 2008 Report Share Posted August 18, 2008 The script style, combined with the short bits of dialogue, makes this feel really rushed. Try lengthening it a bit. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 19, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 19, 2008 Ok I'll try. It'll take me a while to do that Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silent Hunter™ Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 Ep 6 will be up tommrow as I have no school Can't wait for Ep. 6, BTW, nice Fan Fic :D Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Mutant Monster RAEG-HAPYP Posted August 23, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 I'll try to post it buy tommrow Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
King Posted August 23, 2008 Report Share Posted August 23, 2008 haha Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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