Hey people! These are my first cards I've ever made...

[Paladin!]

Hey there!

 

Before you go like : "this sucks GTFO" and stuff like that, I'll let you know that this WILL have OCG errors. (I'd also like to mention that I've learnt Hungarian and German before English!)

 

So if you get SO ANNOYED at OCGs please just go on the next thread lol.

 

If you dont like it, you dont have to bite my head off ;)

 

So anyway here they are! Please rate out of 5...

My very first one:

 

And my second one... (this card may be OP in a good deck)

 

 

No flaming please... I have nothing against you!

[-DG-]

hhmmm.. why didn't you use the card maker?

The cards:4/10

OCG:3/10 needs alot of work

Pics:looks like fake cards...2/10

Name:It needs to look real 5/10 for the idea of the name

Attribute:No magic attribute on a monster...1/10

 

not trying to be harsh dude.just work on it.

[╬「Selatcia」╬]

Might I suggest using the actual card maker?

[Void Old]

I like the concept of these, but you may want to read the OCG thread and look at some of your cards and apply their text when typing effects. Also, you should use the card maker on this site, it makes things easier. ^_^

 

Silver Knight:

 

The whole attacking and defending thing is kinda redundant since it's already in the rules, so the effect should be "Once only, you can Tribute 1 Level 4 or lower monster you control to have this card gain 900 DEF." Type should be "Warrior, not "Knight".

 

Lost Spirit is a bit confusing, you'll have to make a Spirit Battlemaster Fusion Monster.

 

Not bad, but needs a little improvement. :?

[Kale]

agreed with above^

 

your monster has no stars. XD

 

spell-monster fusions dont exist.

 

the effect, from what is readable, on the knight is cool though. ;)

 

try again soon, you might have a little potential here.

 

just learn better OCG and use the actual card maker. XD

 

4/10 for them both.

 

-Kale

[Paladin!]

Thank you for the advice all of you =] and also thanks for not flaming! =]