Guest Zane1988 Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 hey guys this is my first card hope OCG isn't too bad to be here plz rate thanks its been a long time since ive made 1 proply almost a year had to make a new profile, and everything is so new and updated. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 Read about tokens...format.Des Dendle for example.Looks all right though...for a first card ;) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Guest Zane1988 Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 well not my first but its been quite a while thanks ill look Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
PrimalFear Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 its pretty good for being gone for a while ill give it 8.5/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 It's a pretty good card for not having made any in awhile. Another suggestion would be to look at the spell card "Scapegoat" for examples on the correct format for Tokens in effects. Also, the last part of the effect never specifies when the players lose the damage for each Token on the field. You might want to check that ;) overall - 12.26/13.69 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Of The Abyss Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 Can says it bad. Work on it a little, an you'll have good potential, Zane. ^_^ Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 you need to specify when you inflict damage to your opponent. with this wording, you can do it at any moment, as many times as you like. the game would be over with one token on the field. XD also, tokens dont have " " surrounding them. ;) 6.3/10 -Kale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Parting Shot Posted August 7, 2008 Report Share Posted August 7, 2008 also' date=' tokens dont have " " surrounding them. ;)[/quote']Ahem: [spoiler=Yes they do] Counters are the ones that don't have quotes :P Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted August 8, 2008 Report Share Posted August 8, 2008 Not bad for a first card. The holoing is screwed up a little though.8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
-DG- Posted August 8, 2008 Report Share Posted August 8, 2008 Tokens should be like this,(Warrior-Type/EARTH/ Level 4/ATK 1500/DEF 500) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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