Lazer Yoshi Posted August 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2008 More of a life story than poem XD Ill take the advice Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HORUS Posted August 10, 2008 Report Share Posted August 10, 2008 Meh poem... Childish and unoriginal. Lacking in poetic devices. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lazer Yoshi Posted August 10, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 10, 2008 Im only 12 XD Thats why it needed to back that way Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
HORUS Posted August 10, 2008 Report Share Posted August 10, 2008 Okay. Try to use more metaphoric language. Makes for a better effect. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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