L33t Jenkins Posted August 13, 2008 Report Share Posted August 13, 2008 this is my new fanfic and it is based in the year 2012 and most of england is deserted due to there is a new criminal gang roaming the desrted streets of London named the shadow claw kinghts. who have forced people out of there homes fro fun. the best security in england can't even beat them due to there amazing dueling skills and england cannot contact any other country but a group of duelist who skills our extremley high has decided to stop this terror. chapter 1 another chancea roar of motor bikes filled the deserted street as three thugs raced down the streets of manchester. thug 1: As soon as we finish off britain we will finish of the worldthug 2: If the duelists in other countries are as bad as the ones here they are doomed!The thugs let out a laugh as they speed down the street.Meanwhile down in the south east there is a town that is yet to be attacked called guildford where in there newly buit shelter there is a duelgoing on between a 13 year old boy called Ben against 1 of the few gaurds protecting this place.Ben:4000Guard:4000Ben: i'll start by playing Dark Blade in attack mode and lay 1 card face-down and end my turnGuard: My turn and i summon big shield gardena in deffnce mode and end my turnBen: I summon the level 2 tuner Jutte Fighter in attack mode and now prepare for a synchro summon.Guard: Amazing. Ive never dueled someone who had a synchro monster.Ben:Come forth Gaia Kinght, the Force of Earth. (ATK 2600)Guard: Haha it not strong enough to be my monsterBen: look again (ATK 2900)Gaurd: But how?Ben: my face-down was the equip spell fighting spirit which i equiped to my Kinght which increases it ATK by 300 for each monster you have out. now attack.Guard: My deffence!Ben: I play 2 face downs and end my turnGuard: I play scape goat which lets my play 4 sheeps tokens. (DEF 0) x4Ben: Now fighting spirit increases my kinghts atk (ATK 3800)Gaurd: i end my turnBen: I summon Maiden of Macabre in attack mode (ATK 1700) and i equip my knight with big bang shot not only does my kinght gain 400 atk (ATK 4200) it will do peircing damge now attack.Guard:0Gaurd: You manged to beat me in 3 turns with out losing a single life point. You are 1 powerful duelist.All of a sudden a Guard rushed in with his face sweating with fear. Scared Guard: One of the Elite Shadow Claw Knights is heading here and he wants to duel you Ben.End of Chapter Chapter 2: Duel for your lifeBen: But i thought this base was hidden from any type of radarGuard: Somehow they hacked in the system and canceled out our cloaking device and each time we try to get it back up it would shut itself down again.Ben: Then theres no choiceGuard: Yes I'll have to take him onVoice: Oh do you think so. I could beat you with my hands tied behind my back.Ben: Who are youVoice: I'm known as Mystica the greatest Psychic ever.Guard: We sure remember to put that on your gravestone.Mystica: Well come and duel me thenMystica entered the room on a black motorcycle he was wearing a black cloack with red trimming and a long mostache the clurled up at each end. 3 Guards walked tawards him.Guard 1: Were the Triplets who run this place you have to beat all of us at once to get trough to anyone else.Mystica: Very well. Guards and Mystica: DUEL!Guards: 4000Mystica: 4000Guard 2: Ill start by playing Elemental Hero Clayman in deffence (DEF 2000) and end my turn.Ben (whipering quitley): They are dommed in they play like this for the rest of this duel.Mystica: I play fissure destroying your Clayman and then play i play Psi Station and then play Psychic Snail (ATK 1900) which due to Psi Station i can pay 500 lp to increase it's Level by 1 and it's attack by 300. (ATK 2200 Level 5)Guard 2: I got no deffenceMystica: Exactly everything is going as i planned no attack.Guards: 1800Mystica: 3500Guard 3: My turn and i summon Goblin attack force and play two cards face-down now attack.Mystica: 3400Mystica: Oh it my turn and my last. I summon Destruction (ATK 1700) and i use Psi Station (ATK 2000)Mystica: 2900Mystica: and don't think you can save yourself with that magic cylinder and Minaturize.Guard 3: but how do you know.Mystica: magic. Now i equip my monster with Telekinetic Charging Cell. Which means i dont have to pay Life Points to destroy your traps.Guard 3: No!Mystica: Now i play monster reborn to bring back my Snail. Now my snail shall destroy your goblinsGuards: Oh no were wide openMystica: Attack now Destruction with Destruction Blast Wave.Gaurds: AAAAAAAAAHHHHHHH!Guards: 0All three Guards drop to the floor and lied still. not even breathing.Ben: You killed themMystica: Now it is you to die BenBen: Fine then I will duel you. For these three guards.Mystica: Well then lets duel.Mystica pulled his motorbike into the centre of dueling field and attached chains to ben and his dueldiscs and the motor bikeBen: What is this forThe winner will be set free of the chains but the loser will be still be attached and a minuter after the duel has finished the motorbike will go boom. fun isn't it.Ben: Your insane!Mystica: Why thank you. Lets begin the duel.Ben: 4000Mystica: 4000Mystica: I'll start by playing Mind Protector in deffence mode (DEF 2200) AND END MY TURNBen: looks like you got a bad draw but i got a good one. I play Double Summon which lets me summon both dark blade and Jutte Fighter and then i'll use them to Synchro Summon Giai Knight, the Force of Earth. Now attack.Mystica: looks like you have done what exactly i wanted you to do. Now i play my Double Summon to summon Psychic Commander (ATK 1400) and my Snail (ATK 1900) and by discarding my noisy nat from hand to increase the level of 1 monster on the field by 1 and i choose my commander. Now my monsters Level are a total of 8 so i can Synchro Summon my ultimate creature. One with superior Psychic powers. Come forth my Thought Ruler Archfiend (ATK 2700) and the fun isn't over yet i equip my Ultimate monster with axe of despaire making even stronger (ATK 3700) not destroy his so called knight.Ben:2900Mystico:6600Ben huh? how come your Life Points increased.Mystico: Oh. thats my Beasts effect when it destroys a monster i gain life points equal to it's attack. My Ultimate Card shall destroy you.to be continued in chapter 3. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted August 13, 2008 Report Share Posted August 13, 2008 erm... not to sound rude, but this isnt that great. the duel was, ahem, short. it wasnt planned out very well either... any duelist would have gotten rid of Dark Blade before setting up a defense. any good duelist. and if they were almost taking over Britain, then they would have been able to do so. the story line would be better if you had better grammAr. ^_^ keep working at it, i suppose... -Kale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L33t Jenkins Posted August 13, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 13, 2008 erm... not to sound rude' date=' but this isnt that great. the duel was, ahem, short. it wasnt planned out very well either... any duelist would have gotten rid of Dark Blade before setting up a defense. any good duelist. and if they were almost taking over Britain, then they would have been able to do so. the story line would be better if you had better grammAr. ^_^ keep working at it, i suppose... -Kale[/quote'] Ive never been good at writing the first chapter in most of my fan fics hopefully chapter 2 will be much better and there will be a bigger duel Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted August 13, 2008 Report Share Posted August 13, 2008 erm... not to sound rude' date=' but this isnt that great. the duel was, ahem, short. it wasnt planned out very well either... any duelist would have gotten rid of Dark Blade before setting up a defense. any good duelist. and if they were almost taking over Britain, then they would have been able to do so. the story line would be better if you had better grammAr. ^_^ keep working at it, i suppose... -Kale[/quote'] Ive never been good at writing the first chapter in most of my fan fics hopefully chapter 2 will be much better and there will be a bigger duel alright. ^_^ i can understand that. my chapter 1 and prologue werent too great either. i will see your next chapter though. ;) -Kale Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
L33t Jenkins Posted August 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 chapter 2 now posted Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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