Bunter Dwayne Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Sorry, I just changed one VITAL thing... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
staticrevenger Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 9/10 not too bad! Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silas Angel Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 dont say no mistakes cuz every card has a mistake.. but it needs a type Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
zlane Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 8/10 not bad Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Spire Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Give it a type. 7.6/10. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lucas Maximus Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Give it a type. x.x Otherwise, this doesn't look bad. G'job, Dwayne. ;) 7/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
qwer1234 Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 beter then last time 8/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bunter Dwayne Posted August 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Thanks, but why do I need to give it a Type? Isn't the whole point of the Tribute thing to make-your-own-type? Then you could equip it with Type-Specific Equip Spells. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zack Blaze Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 give it a type and a background 3/10 Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Zigzix Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 5/10 cause i cant read it give it a type and maybe get a background? Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bunter Dwayne Posted August 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Yeah Ok, I'll do what the public wants and give it a Type, (grumble, grumble) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
RedRecker Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 No mistakes eh? Hehe, don't worry everyone makes mistakes. Ok, first off, everyone's right it does need a Type, I know you're thinking the effect will suffice but it won't. If the effect is negated then it would have no type, and that just doesn't make sense. You can still keep the effect that changes its type though, no problem with that. Other than that its just the odd OCG error here and there. I'm not 100% sure how to phrase all of it so you may need some others to help you out as well but what I can tell you is:1. Don't say (this increase is permanent) if you don't state that the increase only lasts till a certain phase then it is permanent.2. You need to say when the monster gains its increase in ATK, before the Damage Step or after the Damage Step? up to you.3. The third sentence (the one about it Special Summoning), say 'during your opponent's next End Phase' not 'in'4. For the ??? in ATK and DEF, you should only have 1 question mark.That's all I can spot for now, there might be more there might not, someone else would have to tell you. Overall though I will say good card, good effort. The white background makes the picture and the card feel a bit empty. The pic is good it's just that the white space lets it down. I like the name too. If you want a score, I'll give a 6/10. Make those changes I suggested and it would go up to an 8/10, the other 2 would need a pic with less white background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bunter Dwayne Posted August 14, 2008 Author Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Thanks Red Recker, really helpful tips! I know about the background, it's just it's the perfect pic and I couldn't resist. I'll make the changes. Thanx! :) Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Atomix Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Yep, give it a type and a Background. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
advicedog Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Please give us the effect as it is rather hard to read. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Doctor Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 give it a type and add a background Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Silencerleader Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 Bad...pic...is...bad...pic. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
╬「Selatcia」╬ Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 ??? isn't a real typeSome grammar errorsThe title doesn't really tell the truth.:neutral: Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
End Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 needs a type, small ocg/grammar errors, i don't like the pic, too much white Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Kale Posted August 14, 2008 Report Share Posted August 14, 2008 it needs a type, though isnt this card in another thread here? 7/10 ~K Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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